24/7/11

This is for the Janus Tongue

I felt a crawling,

a calling,

of army ant itchy skin,

a trembling in the ...

… a rampant ...

I scratched my mind,

it didn't mind,

Gently spoon fucked

in the morn,

It took my hand

in lavender silk sinew

and cried rose water

tinted blues

"you must feel, you must feel,

it is written in sand,

Somewhere,

by monks that understand,"

And I laughed until the

laugh was done,

and returned to fold - 

 - emptyhanded - 

and unfulfilled

                   unfold;

who got the origami blues ?

Reviews

[Ted Kniffen]

"Well, I just dropped in to see what condition my condition was in."

Never was in to origami, but I was definitely into the blues and mystic messages from deep within the mind...altered or not.
Very much in the vein of the best story tellers of the 60's. I quite like it.

[gram linski]

Thanks Ted, quite liking is quite a nice thing, lol and not a bad compliment, depending which sixties band you had in mind the Velvet Underground were never on the same bill with anyone famous , and yet, and yet,

[barleygirl]

This is very intriguing . . . had to read it twice just to really soak it in. I love the uninhibited quality of your writing. Some people write in an abstract way, but it conjures up little sense of meaning in my straightforward mind. This message is abstract, but it stimulates a million possibilities in one's mind. I wonder why some abstract writing leaves me blank & some (like this) sparks a million ideas. I wish I could be this free with my meanings in my poetry! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[gram linski]

Thanks for reading Margie, great review, I didn't think my work was that abstract, just sort of following random thought processes, I see the whole thought you only see the part I write down, I can see how this might seem confusing, don't be afraid to run free with words and imagination, just follow the thought, seriously, glad you liked my mad poyim

[Neville]

am not entirely sure why I think this is brilliant.. I am sure I think it tho..

Neville

[gram linski]

Lol, that will be the subliminal messages, thanks N, glad you liked it,

[Neville]

my pleasure

[jacob erin-cilberto]

our thoughts transformed into origami...and they unfold as blues or not...
but feeling matters...even the hard stuff...to feel is to live...to bleed is to live.
I am now going to origami class...so see you later, gram.
my mind is late.
j.

[gram linski]

Haha, you are a zen genius, j, do not panic the Universe will wait for your mind to catch up, failing that , lean back and enjoy,,

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Reads like the alcohol took over with those tactile hallucinations but that the phoenix arose fron its doldrums. Whatever you take the abstract thinking crown that leaves the reader perplexed but in awe gram. Flowing and filled with brittle meaning.

[gram linski]

Cheers John, not a drop of alcohol in sight, just pleasant mindfulness and swans ;}}