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"Mushroom Clouds in Magic Land"   IN COLLABORATION WITH FRIEDA

"Mushroom Clouds in Magic Land" IN COLLABORATION WITH FRIEDA

A Poem by Einstein Noodle
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i am missing Ms. Frieda and decided to re-post this poem which we did together .. i am so angry how one very nasty person was able to drive her from the Cafe :(

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Mushroom Clouds in Magic Land

Tapped upon a mushroom cap's fancy,
      to see if the rabbit hole was rumor
curiouser and curiouser
     about the unimaginable avenue,

She opens my mind and
fear grips my colors
from the hinterland .....                   tremors
wink    
           and blink   
                              and nod

As I sat upon my newfangled gumption
   common sense took a recess,
 spoke in rhyme to the tune of absurd
     to my surprise, the scaramouch    
                 of a head talked back

my birthing in darkness
          musk and dank scent
knocks        my shroom
head explodes
            collide's scope intense

in his elegant persuasion,
made a date for half past daft
took me on a dip of a mystical carpet trip
 alas,  we've lived happily ever after
upon a prime floating island in a cloud

clouds of words
spilling like rough gouged stones in
tumbler's majestic insane
forever now i
 

re-pronounce her name



beginning and



end... ;)

                      


© 2016 Einstein Noodle



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What a superb collaboration from you and dear, dear Frieda = yours are minds that walk the same space.. perhaps!

There's so much in this piece, the colour and highlights take the reader into a world of bewilderingly spaced.out somewhere. The phrasing you've used is another language, a magic not to be translated - and who would want to do that...all of us!

Lewis Carrol would undoubtedly want to join the two of you in another collab, happily sharing his enlightenment via any means - even holding the breath and flying off and away with the daisies. . Brava and brava again.. Loved this. Great musical accompaniment, by the way... ..

Posted 2 Years Ago


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Einstein Noodle

6 Months Ago

yes,,to all that dear emma...i raise my voice with you ... unfortunately i have little hope she will.. read more
emmajoy

6 Months Ago

STILL and always will miss Frieda. She taught me how to giggle, curse, raise a pinky, talk insanitie.. read more



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Great song and a wild journey in the poetry. I did enjoy this poem my friend. Thank you for sharing your amazing words and your thoughts.
Coyote


Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Weeks Ago

so very cool people are still reading and reviewing this ...Frieda was a very special person to many.. read more
Coyote Poetry

3 Weeks Ago

A amazing poem and you are welcome my friend.
What an interesting and psychedelic offering this was with tones of Amarita and Psilocybin. Those magic mushrooms were all the rave of the sixties and formally immortalized by stories such as Alice in Wonderland. The feel is one of intoxication and delirium for the reader but such pleasant dreams visited through the poetry within the safety net of our own minds. I enjoyed the read. Bless.

Posted 1 Month Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

thank you Fabian, for such a sensitive, thorough reading of this....i have to mention every time i a.. read more
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Dee
Tickled my fancy and made me chuckle and smile. Superb work. Good read.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

well....we don't know the whole story but what you say is so true ..some people on-line become inhum.. read more
Dee

2 Months Ago

Never give up hope. For hope is a wonderful thing. And a treasure to withhold. As is faith.
Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

you are right of course! :) thank you for i am renewed in my hope of not only having Freida back at .. read more
this is one outstanding piece of writing. so sad for frieda, and i hope she returns soon so to form another collaborative work with you

Posted 4 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

4 Months Ago

thanks so much sette! on behalf of Frieda and myself .. i am afraid she is determined not to return .. read more
sette

4 Months Ago

that I can relate with someone with zest for life is sorely missed
It was so wonderful reading Frieda's voice again... she is indeed missed! This piece is truly poets poetry!

Posted 5 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Months Ago

oh God bless you Travis...so happy this brought her to your mind...missed dearly indeed :( i'm sure .. read more
Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)

5 Months Ago

It was more than a pleasure.
I think you are definitely channeling Alice here, my friend. The tone is very reminiscent of Jabberwocky. I like it very much. It's sufficiently looney toons to appeal to my very warped mind! Great fun, and very well written. Thank you for a great read.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Months Ago

ahahaha another loony simpatico eh!? how nice to meet you Horseman ... thank you for reviewing .. gl.. read more
The Iron Horseman

5 Months Ago

You're welcome, Egg Noodle! :) It's a pleasure to meet you, too.
Einstein Noodle

5 Months Ago

:) ......................
Really miss her too, it always amazes me how trolls get their own way, bring back Freida.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Months Ago

ohh thanks my friend ... for reading and reviewing this one ...you bring Frieda to mind ;( yes... sh.. read more
Completeness lies in beginning and end- it is all but an ongoing journey a circle of love- take what we need and leave the rest- within lies many tests, but untested we are tame and lifeless , lovely words🌹

Posted 5 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Months Ago

that is the most philosophical review to this poem we have ..your thoughts and insights are better t.. read more
Rose Petal🌹

5 Months Ago

It’s my pleasure if only we look deeper what a splendid world we’d live in🌹Thankyou for you.. read more
Einstein Noodle

5 Months Ago

yes.....i am with you 100%
When I fist started teaching, there were a group of kids experimenting with the hallucinogenic properties of mushrooms.I got an education of my own that year. I'll never look at cow patties the same.
This is a wonderful collaboration. The rhythm feels like running and jerking then it's off and running again. It creates a unique rhythm and definitely gives that psyched out feeling.
Hopefully Frieda will come back and just block the jerks. Every site has one or two.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Months Ago

i absolutely love it when people find this one as it brings me back to our dear friend Frieda .. i a.. read more
JayceeC

5 Months Ago

Just had to edit the heck out of my grammar. That will teach me to comment right before bed from my.. read more
Einstein Noodle

5 Months Ago

ahahaha i do that all the time ;}
Beautiful. I'm not really into poetry, and, honestly, I was just looking for a quick piece to review in hopes of reciprocity, but this one really snagged me. It is visceral without any specifics standing out as such. I want to read it several times.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Months Ago

ahahahaha not into poetry are we!!!??? well you just keep searching and your modus operandi may just.. read more

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