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"Mushroom Clouds in Magic Land"   IN COLLABORATION WITH FRIEDA

"Mushroom Clouds in Magic Land" IN COLLABORATION WITH FRIEDA

A Poem by Einstein Noodle
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i am missing Ms. Frieda and decided to re-post this poem which we did together .. i am so angry how one very nasty person was able to drive her from the Cafe :(

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Mushroom Clouds in Magic Land

Tapped upon a mushroom cap's fancy,
      to see if the rabbit hole was rumor
curiouser and curiouser
     about the unimaginable avenue,

She opens my mind and
fear grips my colors
from the hinterland .....                   tremors
wink    
           and blink   
                              and nod

As I sat upon my newfangled gumption
   common sense took a recess,
 spoke in rhyme to the tune of absurd
     to my surprise, the scaramouch    
                 of a head talked back

my birthing in darkness
          musk and dank scent
knocks        my shroom
head explodes
            collide's scope intense

in his elegant persuasion,
made a date for half past daft
took me on a dip of a mystical carpet trip
 alas,  we've lived happily ever after
upon a prime floating island in a cloud

clouds of words
spilling like rough gouged stones in
tumbler's majestic insane
forever now i
 

re-pronounce her name



beginning and



end... ;)

                      


© 2016 Einstein Noodle



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What a superb collaboration from you and dear, dear Frieda = yours are minds that walk the same space.. perhaps!

There's so much in this piece, the colour and highlights take the reader into a world of bewilderingly spaced.out somewhere. The phrasing you've used is another language, a magic not to be translated - and who would want to do that...all of us!

Lewis Carrol would undoubtedly want to join the two of you in another collab, happily sharing his enlightenment via any means - even holding the breath and flying off and away with the daisies. . Brava and brava again.. Loved this. Great musical accompaniment, by the way... ..

Posted 2 Years Ago


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Einstein Noodle

6 Months Ago

yes,,to all that dear emma...i raise my voice with you ... unfortunately i have little hope she will.. read more
emmajoy

6 Months Ago

STILL and always will miss Frieda. She taught me how to giggle, curse, raise a pinky, talk insanitie.. read more



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You had me at "mushroom". Haha. I don't know you very well, (if at all) but it feels almost as if you are heavily influenced by the beat poets. Just a thought. This was very colorful and kinda psychedelic. Put any thought into making an animated short along with it? Good Poem. CD

Posted 6 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

6 Months Ago

yes..we are just getting to know one another ..thanks for visiting ..and like i have said to others... read more
wow amazing collaboration. Seamlessly orchestrated and well written. Enjoyed this immensely.

Helena

Posted 7 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

6 Months Ago

Helena! so happy to find your review of this! we had the best time with it for sure ..Frieda has qui.. read more
This is mind blowing! Would you mind looking at mine? It's called becoming one.

Posted 7 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Months Ago

ohhhh i sure will writer16! glad you enjoyed this very fun trip taken with my good friend Frieda ..... read more
Oh my gosh, that is amazing and pretty much says it all. Just enjoy and live, set aside judgement. I am so sorry your friend felt she had to leave this site. There are angry people everywhere. My first experiences on this site, aside from a few nice people, was pretty weird. I hope she comes back. Great poem!

Posted 7 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Months Ago

:) thank you Karen ...from both of us ...there are many here who still miss her but i am afraid she .. read more
Wow love this I read it in awe
Love it

Posted 7 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Months Ago

thank you for an enthusiastic response to this poem ... Frieda would be tickled to know it ..i will.. read more
This is fantastic, very psychedelic feel to it like it could have been a Hendrix song. Thanks for sharing this.

Glen x

Posted 7 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Months Ago

Glen.... i love your comments... and what a compliment to mention Hendrix in it.... very cool! thank.. read more
Hello, Einstein! :)
I'm sorry your friend left the café. I'd enjoy collaborating with you, if you're interested.
I didn't catch the message in this poem, but I enjoyed the phrasing. I'm slow with metaphors. Haha

Posted 7 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Months Ago

thank you Matt! always interested in a collab. mail me your idea and lets begin ;) i am always happy.. read more
Wow enjoyed this extraordinary poem. Great word choice . I like how u took on fairytale to expand and create your muse. I do that many times too. Kudos.

I'm a newbie here, pls do review, comment my first poem here, wud luv to know your thoughts, I'm navigating the site looking for poetic interaction,

Posted 7 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Months Ago

i will surely visit ... so gratified you chose this one .. a collaboration with Frieda who has left .. read more
Oooh the two of you worked some magic with your words. Freda...I do believe she left about the same time I took a vacation from the café. She is surely missed and impossible to replace. Words that dance, and words the conspire. How contraire. You fan dangled my head! ;)

Posted 8 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Months Ago

yes ...very sad she has gone :( nice to meet another who loved her works ... your fan dangled head r.. read more
Muse

7 Months Ago

Happy New Year
Einstein Noodle

7 Months Ago

:) ........................
"As I sat upon my newfangled gumption
common sense took a recess,
spoke in rhyme to the tune of absurd
to my surprise, the scaramouch
of a head talked back"

At this point i wish it was a full story.... beautiful write.

Posted 9 Months Ago


Mirror

8 Months Ago

:-( Am sorry.
Einstein Noodle

8 Months Ago

:-( me too ......
John Alexander McFadyen

8 Months Ago

Hey 'E' if you are still in contact give her my email:
passion869@btinternet.com

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