"Mushroom Clouds in Magic Land"   IN COLLABORATION WITH FRIEDA

"Mushroom Clouds in Magic Land" IN COLLABORATION WITH FRIEDA

A Poem by Einstein Noodle
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i am missing Ms. Frieda and decided to re-post this poem which we did together .. i am so angry how one very nasty person was able to drive her from the Cafe :(

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Mushroom Clouds in Magic Land

Tapped upon a mushroom cap's fancy,
      to see if the rabbit hole was rumor
curiouser and curiouser
     about the unimaginable avenue,

She opens my mind and
fear grips my colors
from the hinterland .....                   tremors
wink    
           and blink   
                              and nod

As I sat upon my newfangled gumption
   common sense took a recess,
 spoke in rhyme to the tune of absurd
     to my surprise, the scaramouch    
                 of a head talked back

my birthing in darkness
          musk and dank scent
knocks        my shroom
head explodes
            collide's scope intense

in his elegant persuasion,
made a date for half past daft
took me on a dip of a mystical carpet trip
 alas,  we've lived happily ever after
upon a prime floating island in a cloud

clouds of words
spilling like rough gouged stones in
tumbler's majestic insane
forever now i
 

re-pronounce her name



beginning and



end... ;)

                      


© 2016 Einstein Noodle



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What a superb collaboration from you and dear, dear Frieda = yours are minds that walk the same space.. perhaps!

There's so much in this piece, the colour and highlights take the reader into a world of bewilderingly spaced.out somewhere. The phrasing you've used is another language, a magic not to be translated - and who would want to do that...all of us!

Lewis Carrol would undoubtedly want to join the two of you in another collab, happily sharing his enlightenment via any means - even holding the breath and flying off and away with the daisies. . Brava and brava again.. Loved this. Great musical accompaniment, by the way... ..

Posted 2 Years Ago


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Einstein Noodle

9 Months Ago

yes,,to all that dear emma...i raise my voice with you ... unfortunately i have little hope she will.. read more
emmajoy

9 Months Ago

STILL and always will miss Frieda. She taught me how to giggle, curse, raise a pinky, talk insanitie.. read more



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“made a date for half past daft” I loved that line! Great collaboration. The imagery and movement of the piece rather put me in mind of the surreal stylings of some of David Bowie’s work.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

you, as so many, point to that line among the rest .. of course it is Frieda's .. her being the reas.. read more
MomzillaNC

1 Year Ago

You’re welcome. And, thanks, good to connect with you again as well.
Excellent piece. It has a John Lennon meets Lewis Carroll feel to it, with a hint of David Bowie. I can't, in all honesty, find anything to criticise. It's elegant, surreal and faintly disturbing.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

thanks for visiting and the thorough sensitive review ... your words are very encouraging and i will.. read more
I did not know why Ms. Frieda left, so that brought me a measure of sadness to know it was a fool who might well not even linger here. But your words, your collab, shows the beauty and brilliance of words and thoughts flowing together from two magnificent streams. Wondrous.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

oh thank you Owl! i smile smile smile in remembrances of Frieda every time someone finds and reviews.. read more
Holy, my eyes could not land on a spot to keep focus on... The rabbit hole of blended words and stylistic bravado... Scaramouch...? Whatever this word means... I am stealing it... Haha... Elegantly penned...

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

11 Months Ago

:( ......................
John Alexander McFadyen

11 Months Ago

He is still active in the cafe!
Einstein Noodle

11 Months Ago

:(( .......................
I love this poem and am so sorry the collaboration was interrupted! Love the whimsy - shades of Lewis Carrol! "Spoke in rhyme to the tune of absurd"-great line! Great free- flow. Beautiful!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

thank you so much Annette! so happy you enjoyed this collaboration ... i am glad to have met you tod.. read more
Annette Pisano-Higley

1 Year Ago

The pleasure is all mine! And happy to meet you too!
Fantastic read really enjoyed this, I really love the opening and also the line
'As I sat upon my newfangled gumption' has a brilliant ring that stirs a great image. Top writing, lovely read.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

thanks Hitch! i will thank you for Frieda as well .. so gratified that you enjoyed it ... that was o.. read more
What a stunning write... style, message, fun... it's all there. Well done. Sorry you lost your collaborator. Fabulous melding of minds here.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

what a treat that you chose this one to read ..as it brings me back to it and to wonderful friend Fr.. read more
A demand for the absurd as common sense takes precedence in the reconciling for things that make no sense. Your magic land paints quite the rythmn. It takes me along its drug induced ride while blurring the lines between memory, dream and hallucination, jauntily escapading through one's lifetime in a blink of an eye

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

"I think she's (he's) got it ! By George, she's (he's) got it" to quote a line from long ago ;) i l.. read more
I didn't know that a bright mushroom clouds in a magic land could become so deep and dark. You are an inspiration. Sad to read about what happened to Frieda, one could think that this is the only place on earth where people are allowed to express who they are in all their glory, but apparently not....

I liked this one alot.

// O

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

thank you! and so fine to meet you this morning! it should be for sure ..i like the way you put it ... read more

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