"Mushroom Clouds in Magic Land"   IN COLLABORATION WITH FRIEDA

"Mushroom Clouds in Magic Land" IN COLLABORATION WITH FRIEDA

A Poem by Einstein Noodle
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i am missing Ms. Frieda and decided to re-post this poem which we did together .. i am so angry how one very nasty person was able to drive her from the Cafe :(

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Mushroom Clouds in Magic Land

Tapped upon a mushroom cap's fancy,
      to see if the rabbit hole was rumor
curiouser and curiouser
     about the unimaginable avenue,

She opens my mind and
fear grips my colors
from the hinterland .....                   tremors
wink    
           and blink   
                              and nod

As I sat upon my newfangled gumption
   common sense took a recess,
 spoke in rhyme to the tune of absurd
     to my surprise, the scaramouch    
                 of a head talked back

my birthing in darkness
          musk and dank scent
knocks        my shroom
head explodes
            collide's scope intense

in his elegant persuasion,
made a date for half past daft
took me on a dip of a mystical carpet trip
 alas,  we've lived happily ever after
upon a prime floating island in a cloud

clouds of words
spilling like rough gouged stones in
tumbler's majestic insane
forever now i
 

re-pronounce her name



beginning and



end... ;)

                      


© 2016 Einstein Noodle



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What a superb collaboration from you and dear, dear Frieda = yours are minds that walk the same space.. perhaps!

There's so much in this piece, the colour and highlights take the reader into a world of bewilderingly spaced.out somewhere. The phrasing you've used is another language, a magic not to be translated - and who would want to do that...all of us!

Lewis Carrol would undoubtedly want to join the two of you in another collab, happily sharing his enlightenment via any means - even holding the breath and flying off and away with the daisies. . Brava and brava again.. Loved this. Great musical accompaniment, by the way... ..

Posted 2 Years Ago


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Einstein Noodle

11 Months Ago

yes,,to all that dear emma...i raise my voice with you ... unfortunately i have little hope she will.. read more
emmajoy

11 Months Ago

STILL and always will miss Frieda. She taught me how to giggle, curse, raise a pinky, talk insanitie.. read more



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the depth and complexity of this piece is really cool...
makes me want to collaborate to bring this deep writing to the surface-
encouraging,
drug trippingly well done


Posted 2 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

:) "..drug trippingly well done" what a perfect review ..we had such fun writing this one (at least .. read more
Nice poem. My favorite stanza is

"in his elegant persuasion,
made a date for half past daft
took me on a dip of a mystical carpet trip
alas, we've lived happily ever after
upon a prime floating island in a cloud"

It has a great rhyme through it!

Posted 2 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

very happy that verse stood out .. as i re-posted this to say how Frieda is missed and that is hers .. read more
Cyprian Van Dyke

2 Years Ago

You're most welcome!
Thank you, you too!
Nice memory. So many old timers not on any more. Kathie

Posted 2 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

thank you Valentine! seems a lot of writers here are thinking of the Frieda "Pickle" ... her imagina.. read more
"Wink and blink and nod...." love that! I often think the clock is stuck at "half past daft" in this crazy world we live in. Frieda is missed by many at WC, but it seems she will never return. Sad on so many levels really. Your collaboration with her was wonderful. Lydi**

Posted 2 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

thanks for visiting Lydia ..yes she is missed by all ..sadly from what i am hearing you are probably.. read more
Lydia

2 Years Ago

It's a great one. Love and hugs back at ya!!
love that fairy land ! wheres alice ? great write,loced it

Posted 2 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

glad you read this one ..many it seems are missing Freida lately ... more than normal .. so re-poste.. read more
I liked your mention of winken,blinken and nod, LOL. There is more than one rabbit hole, yet I think we have all found ourselves tumbling down one or another and wondering how the heck we got there. Luckily Alice was able to push beyond the absurdity and find her way despite the array of characters she stumbled upon. Perhaps if we keep our heads about us while others lose theirs we will find our place, not below ground, but in the sun.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

thanks for seeing this one Icey! Frieda is so much missed just had to re-post this old one on her be.. read more
icelandicblue

2 Years Ago

I miss her too.
Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

yes ...she should return says i! :(
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laughing...I'm curiouser, were you deep fried shrooms when you wrote this? hahaha
I love it, E!!! What a fun and adventurous read this was :))) Your awesome!

Posted 3 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Years Ago

dear lynn!!! i can not tell you how blessed your visit to this poem has made me ... our dear wonderf.. read more
LOVE IT! I'm always a sucker for wordplay, so my favorite parts are "my shroom" and "collide's scope intense," but I am also a huge fan of "half past daft." While I love these moments of wordplay, when doing something like this you have to be very careful that it doesn't get too 'purple,' so every word has to be on lock. There are a few teetering moments in here, but nothing egregious as to keep me from thoroughly enjoying it!

Posted 4 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

4 Years Ago

i am thrilled that you found this .. and blessed your comments brought me back to it .. collaboratin.. read more
my birthing in darkness
musk and dank scent
knocks my shroom
head explodes
collide's scope intense----This was a trip! You never cease to make me laugh. The shroom...hysterical. Thank you for collaborating with Frieda to produce this delightful trip to an altered state of dysfunction. I almost feel like I was down that particular rabbit hole with you! Great write, my friend. You captured the magic carpet ride perfectly.


Posted 4 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

4 Years Ago

Really glad you found this one Bright O! it was such a treat to write with Frieda who i wish would r.. read more
Bright Ocean Star

2 Years Ago

I miss Frieda, too. Has the Cafe' settled down and driven the trolls away? I haven't been able to .. read more
Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

from time to time one tries to re-appear but is recognized pretty quick and is reported and leaves ... read more
"Mushroom Clouds in Magic Land." Hmph. I loved the double entendre in the title where it implies both something that feels like a drug-induced fantasy and a disturbance in a magic land like that of a an atomic weapon yet still retains the fantastical atmosphere of the land. The rush of love feeling both euphoric and destructive in one's hands, and always ending in the same place: reiterating the memories of love just in that day alone, let alone in all the time that your speaker has known that person.

Intense poem, well done.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

4 Years Ago

thanks Tai! .. i really appreciate you finding this one and bringing it back to me .. so privileged .. read more

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