Door Mat

Door Mat

A Poem by Einstein Noodle

the door mat

Strutting oh so purposely
from one aisle to the next
testing oh so gingerly
to find the one that's best

textures must be supple
able to conform 
lay back down when ruffled
amendable whenever torn

the door mat, simple in its use,
scrapes clean the treading of
grime, grease and refuse
takes a punch (so much in love)

slap the mat down hard to rid
the presence of my heel
pressure hose what i did
beg forgiveness as i kneel

get your a*s up off the floor
best be perfect on my return
clean yourself you ragged w***e
i've irons handy to singe and burn

the door slams on her writhing tears
life drains through tongue and groove
things may get better in coming years
fire burning blisters; salve he says .... to soothe.
 
E. 5/28/15

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Right off, I knew what you meant by "doormat" & that this message describes human behavior. At first, you do a great job of using "doormat" attributes that can also double as human attributes. Then the message takes a turn into a darker realm, which is very intensely told & true to life. In the end, it feels like the narrator urges the recipient of this message to first, act like a doormat, then being chastised for acting like a doormat -- this part is especially true to life for this type of relationship. You simply can't win. It's very creepy how spot-on this message is . . . showing instead of telling.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

thanks Barleygirl ..for reading and for your very thorough review ... Doormats rise up right?!!! ..t.. read more



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The title intrigued me- how can someone write a poem on something as mundane as a Doormat! Well, after reading your work, I am amazed how well one can write about the doormat and well the human behavior.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

4 Months Ago

yes...the door mat ;) thank you .. Anjali for taking time to peruse my little streets here ... i did.. read more
It shows an exemplary talent to write a beautiful poem about something so mundane. And then to take it further into such subtle realms of behaviour and the antics of yer actual human . Beyond belief and extraordinary.

Posted 8 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

8 Months Ago

i'm glad you found this one Ken .. its a subject that touches so many lives ...the cycle of abuse is.. read more
Ken Simm.

8 Months Ago

We both understand this don't we. you are more than welcome.
Door mat? I thought this would be about a human door mat, not a rug. Valentine

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

hmm .. it is :((( can't imagine a rug ... but feeling the burn :((( abuse is beyond my words :(((read more
I found the grittiness appropriate for the piece. It feels dug in, grinding like door mat realities tend to be.

Leo, I remember him from my college days, saw his lecture on love.

Regards,
Al

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

thanks big Al! ... the perps get off on the grinding and gritty ... writing from that perspective is.. read more
Alfred Kukitz

1 Year Ago

Inspiring, hopeful! Leo was filled with magic, he had a book on Love, good read.
Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

:) .................. "all we need is love"
Right off, I knew what you meant by "doormat" & that this message describes human behavior. At first, you do a great job of using "doormat" attributes that can also double as human attributes. Then the message takes a turn into a darker realm, which is very intensely told & true to life. In the end, it feels like the narrator urges the recipient of this message to first, act like a doormat, then being chastised for acting like a doormat -- this part is especially true to life for this type of relationship. You simply can't win. It's very creepy how spot-on this message is . . . showing instead of telling.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

thanks Barleygirl ..for reading and for your very thorough review ... Doormats rise up right?!!! ..t.. read more
Having spent a few years as a door mat myself, I would say this description is pretty accurate. Sometimes the door mat finds a way to re-purpose.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

;) yes! i think that is one hell of a victory my dear friend ... love and peace
E.
A interesting tale written.
"get your a*s up off the floor
best be perfect on my return
clean yourself you ragged w***e
i've irons handy to singe and burn"
The above lines were my favorite. I wanted to know more. Nice visions create by the entertaining words. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

abuse occurs every day and night ..wanted to write from the abuser's point of view .thank you Coyote.. read more
Coyote Poetry

1 Year Ago

The poem made the reader think and you are welcome.
...and that is why I don't wear shoes.....door mats should be made of quick sand so they can swallow their captors and spit out the bones and hang them like christmas ornaments from the freedom tree

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

wow! i like that! ... yes let that very first step be the last ... abuse is a curse on our souls ..a.. read more
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-- sadly, i've been at the receiving end... but i'm glad it's over... -- a powerful piece with a message that needs to be repeated until no one succumbs to being treated like this...

Posted 1 Year Ago


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1 Year Ago

-- dear E. ... thank you so much... -- when i read a poem like this, i wish for more poems like this.. read more
Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

we are together in that sera ... and right back at ya with big hugs and thanksgiving wishes :))
.

1 Year Ago

-- thank you and ditto... :)
Einstein! You can write a poem out of anything, can't you? I might want to start looking around the room to see which object fascinates me enough to write a poem about it. ;) Great poem!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

ahahaha! so glad this inspired ... metaphors are everywhere eh!? thank you for taking time here Blue.. read more

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