Lá Fhéile Pádraig, "the Day of the Festival of Patrick"

Lá Fhéile Pádraig, "the Day of the Festival of Patrick"

A Poem by Einstein Noodle
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this is my third weeks assignment for the MOOC i am in .. we had two choices and mine was to write a Pantoum. It also is supposed to address a cultural tradition with its meaning then and today

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a Pantoum
My Da wasn't much of a talking man;
he loved his stew and brew.
At table he told us a story
of how the Green holds true.
He loved his stew and brew but
harpooned his feeling free.
At table he told us a story or two
while bouncing me on his knee.
Harpooning his feeling free,
tears pierced his cheek that day.
While bouncing me on his knee;
he knew i would go away.
A tear pierced his cheek that day.
Diaspora paraded the streets.
He knew i would go away;
while cèilidhs of Dál Riata did meet
When diaspora paraded the ave
they forgot the bones and the teeth.
While cèilidhs of Dal Riata gathered
babies died in the streets.
They forgot the bones and the teeth.
At table he told a story or two.
Babies died in the streets.
It never was talked of, 'tis true

© 2022 Einstein Noodle


Author's Note

Einstein Noodle
The Pantoum is made up of any number of quatrains. The second and fourth lines of preceding verses becomes the first and third line of the following verse. The last verse is a little different in that the first and third line are the second and fourth of the stanza above and the closing line is many times repeats the opening line.

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What a riviting poem. It seems the greater the tragedy the harder humans try to hide their feelings.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

thank you, Cowboy! what a treat you found this to read .. hatching it was like going through what i .. read more
It's always interesting to study a poem for it's technical form then set that aside and read it for content and general flow of subject. After I stopped picking it apart I really enjoyed the read. I could almost feel the grit of the story in antique black and white looking through cold windows listening to stories told as they happened in the streets outside parading respectfully by babies lifeless bodies. Obviously you took some liberties with the form.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

:))))))))))))))))) well .. not so much liberties but lack of talent .. and a ceiling on restricting .. read more
Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

do you think if i divided it into quatrains it would be of benefit?
William Michael Reeves

2 Years Ago

That's amazing that you asked that! I was thinking about the very same thing this morning and was go.. read more
I revisited this one this morning and I have to say it reminded me of my own daddy. He too liked to pull a pint and Irish stew. I must confess of his stew I am not a fan. :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Years Ago

ahahaha ... me Ma made all the stew in the house .. but learned how to kick up a bit by watching and.. read more
dear Gene... your poetry is gentle for the
Telling. Life is full of sorrow... and we never know about tomorrow. I feel the Lilt of Angel wings where birds sing and children play their flute... the Piper to Pay... I have so little time to pray. tenderly, Pat


Posted 3 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Years Ago

wow! you put a big smile on my face this morning Pat! you took a bit of a walk and found this one fr.. read more
Patricia Wedel

1 Year Ago

dear Gene... a year has passed, and "Hope" is all we have... the World has become Insane... at least.. read more
Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

thanks so much for your well wishes Ms. Wedel! i send them right back at ya in spades my friend! and.. read more
Thank you for sharing this excellently rendered effort, Gene....
I find this piece to be well worded and expressed, while tragically sad to contemplate, and I also very much enjoy that you've included a touch of Gaelic historical fact and dialect for our enlightenment.
I felt a surge of palpably impacting power, both in emotion and imagery, from the trying tyme threaded deftly throughout.

It is quite easy to tell you poured a considerable bit of your heart and soul out onto the page, as-well-as, gave an honest effort to "get it right" in detail and form, and we both know the Pantoum is not all that simple, eh?
Cultural recountings like this are bound to touch deeply into my own Celtic core -- from the more tragic days of yore under the red dragon in me oon daer Wales … well told, Syr Bard.

Technically, there are a number of issues you could address, if you've the mind to.
Love the Gaelic title and use … would be great to include pronouncements and translations in Author's Note. I think your choice of music and its picture are spot-on to carry the mood.

Another fine effort from one of the site's most entertaining artists.
Thank you, My Fine Friend … SLAINTE! ⁓ Richard 🍃

Posted 4 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

4 Years Ago

:) Slainte Mhath :) glad this touched your Celtic soul Richard ... yes! the troubles ... three gener.. read more
Einstein Noodle, this is an excellent pantoum. The subject (St. Patrick) is tremendously heart wrenching, but each verse of the poem enlightens the reader.

You are really good at formal poetry and I hope you continue. I loved your version of the pantoum.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Tamara Beryl Latham

5 Years Ago

Thanks Einstein. I'll try to post some different forms of classical poetry.

Decades .. read more
Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

that's a shame ... you must have gained some wonderful experience participating in such a way.
Tamara Beryl Latham

5 Years Ago

Yes, a little. Way too much work though. There was a classical poetry publication titled "The Form.. read more
What an amazing tale is told here and so darn adeptly too... I would never dare try anything so complex.. Peace, Love & All Good Things, plus a whole heap of respect.... N

Posted 5 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

oh Neville! it was a nightmare ...I can't tell you the write and re-writes ...every time I re-checke.. read more
Neville

5 Years Ago

Ha' I can imagine the nightmare... always a pleasure tho when I visit your pages here......Neville
Powerful use of this format

Posted 5 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

it was no easy breezy Cherrie :} i can't tell you how many re-writes i went through and still am not.. read more
Cherrie Palmer

5 Years Ago

I get it, it is very hard to be happy with a set gh low like this one, but you hit it dead-on.
Einstein Noodle

5 Years Ago

thanks Cherrie :)
You certainly nailed the form but with another amazing slice of history served up raw. Kudos!

Posted 6 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

6 Years Ago

John...this form was so confusing to me..i was sure my dementia was triggering ;} ..it was worked an.. read more
Great write Einstein.
Those words from parents must have left haunting memories. Sad that even today, those same words are spoken in many languages to children.


Posted 6 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

6 Years Ago

yes indeed, Paul .. our children do leave at some point in time .. and if heritage is not taught it .. read more

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