Sticks

My dog showed me

sticks

Her name is Bella and

she showed three sticks to me

on our walk

sticking 

out of the creek water where

she stood slurpingupdrink

Bella is faun colored and 

Bull Mastiff'd

wide mouthed frog

one hundred twenty five pounds full

 ..

she showed me

one long, finger thick stick with tails ...and another

eighteen inches ...ends shredded and

one for my mind

One

For

My

Mind

its the process you see

we took them home one day and

i made a bird

she showed me sticks

i made a bird

it's flying now behind my eye

every time we walk along the creek. 

The process .....

Do you see?

her sticks?

:)

08/28/2017

E.

Author's Note

Reviews

[Eilis]

The poem, the way you’ve written it, feels almost like a spell. It is a kind of magic to find something that could easily go unnoticed and bring it to life. And the way you’ve done it here- taking the three sticks and giving them the flight of the bird- feels kind of otherworldly.

I enjoy the repetition and simplicity of your wording. The syntax adds a somewhat haunting or dream-like note. The call of the creek and the ready ears of the dog becoming attuned to one another.

Animals (and nature at large) have many lessons available if we are open to hearing them. I love the way this poem shows that and also shows the state of being open to imagination and wonder. Wonder is something we never outgrow.

This is lovely work, E. I couldn’t help but see what Margie said about Bella having passed. I’m so sorry to read that. Her memory lives on in great works like this.

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you so much for your empathy Eillis .. Bella seems not to have departed just yet ... her spirit lingers, i am sure until Norma and I are ready .. and Bella becomes so many sweet memories .. and thank you for your thoughtful, considered reveiw .. for you to experience our walk in the park as we felt it is completely gratifying for me ... you made me day .. :))))))))))))))))
E.

[Eilis]

You’re welcome, E. On both counts.

[Taino]

She shares what seems a simple stick but means much more to her. You acknowledged it's importance and created something so beautiful, like a symbol of the special bond you both share. Please keep writing and creating!

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you Taino for bringing me back to this poem...it was a special walk and yes with doggies we have mystical bonds don't you think?! thank you for taking time and for your encouragement ..which i will take to heart! :)
E.

[Zoya]

You both have a great understanding I must say. What a pair you two make!
A light, fun to read poem. Enjoyed it!

[Einstein Noodle]

you are very kind ...Bella is much more full of it than i ;)) we do have fun tho ... and now we have Beauregard to join us as well. he is an English Mastiff and at 8 months old is already 106 lbs ... he is going to be a monster! :) thanks for reviewing Zoe .. much appreciated!
E.

[Zoya]

Haha, all of you make a happy family im sure! Most welcome.

[Mirror]

wow.... I love this sticks!!! the poem is fun and makes a good pleasure reading. it is also creative.

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks so much Mirror! so gratified you found this one a fun read ... the whole experience was over an extended time period so it holds lots of good feelings inside me .. so happy you enjoyed
E.

[Mirror]

you are most welcome, dearie.

[Great Aunt Astri]

You and your dog in harmony! She knew what you needed, and you created a beautiful sculpture.
Nicely done.

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks Auntie ..such a pleasure to have you review ... glad you found this one and enjoyed .. Bella is something else no doubt! love ya!
E.

[Paul Bell]

I suppose that's why dogs lead, and humans follow.
Dogs have remarkable abilities. From sensing cancer, to everyday tasks humans could never contemplate.

[Einstein Noodle]

yes they do ... incredible sensing abilities ... just by allowing our love to them heals US doesn't it ..so weird how that works ;)
E.

[Neville]

Quite unique, another gift from the Dogs methinks. Mine is a young Border Terrier 'Brulee' just brought me part of a brick, maybe I will build a wall one day.

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahahaha Brulee!! what a great name for a brick layer ;) my younger Beauregard picks up rocks ... i should re-anme them Sticks and Stones eh!? ..thanks for stopping Neville ... sure enjoyed your review
E.

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

Animals are so intelligent
seems she sees beautiful in many
things as I do poetry is everywhere.

There is still life in the wood even
though it isn't growing somewhere
it's that energy she was just showing
you saying what can you do with
this daddy.

Like my experience yesterday
September 24 2017
before dinner
at 6pm I leaned over
too far near the sharp end of
the small table to plug in my
cell phone to charge,

And ended up bumping
the right side of my forehead
but no bleeding but
It really hurt I'm clumsy
like my mother,

But kit she's
a beautiful white German shepherd
and she wanted to lick my ouch spot
On my forehead all better
was so cute lol... thought I'd share
that experience with you I might
make it into a poem.

Thank you for sharing
This lovely jewel. Take care friend

[Einstein Noodle]

oh Benita..thank you so much for sharing that experience with your Kit .. my sister had a white German Shepherd named Gretel (God bless her soul) .. yes ..they are so intuitive and can open wondrous worlds up to us ..if we just pay a little attention .. i'm glad your owey didn't bleed or need stitches .. i have bumped me own noggin' in just such a fashion .. i will look for your poem :)
E.

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

Very true :)

[andrew mitchell]

The wonders of dead wood brought to life in your writing E, nice work.

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks big A ... sure appreciate your visits .. i had such a blessed time during the whole "process" of this one .. along with my beautiful Bella ;)
E.

[Richard🖌]

What a splendidly rendered story poem, Gene! ✨
And, that beautiful bird is a masterpiece of creative art, straight from its finder's and crafter's creatively concerted effort.
I'd say you make an excellent team … too bad Bella cannot wield a pen, giving us her thoughts, too, but I doubt they'd be far different than your own amazingly entertaining, vividly entreating version.
One unique aspect of this piece is the manner in which you've formed your lines and verses, combining with the before and after pictures of those "Sticks" … I'd say Gene and Bella belong together.
I love it all, knowing, too, that wee original structure is worthy of its place in an art museum for all to enjoy, and what a lovely finish and presentation, My Friend.

Thank you for the wondrously unforgettable thrill! ⁓ Richard : )


200/100

[Einstein Noodle]

WOW!!! i am so humbled and pleased all at once sir ...your enjoyment of this one in all its "presentation" is lifting my own heart and soul this morning...thank you so much for kind and encouraging words ... thank you thank you!
E.

[Einstein Noodle]

ps i especially appreciate the specifics you point out about structure ..it helps a lot you know ;)

[Lydia Shutter]

The concept of something "flying behind my eye" is super duper! Dogs see things a little differently than we do and of course poets see things differently to begin with. What a lovely write...filled with imagination and happiness just to be on a nature walk. Lydi**

[Einstein Noodle]

hi Lydia! "...just to be on a nature walk" for sure ... all day everyday right?! ;)
E.