Alone

Alone

A Poem by Einstein Noodle
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do take the time to watch the dance video ..it is so cool...says i! ;)

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 Peering

The pair pirouettes on
                                  the pier.

The lightning wasn't quite right
             
they

couldn't quite focus on point.

I am not sure what happened to them.

They just kept spinning 

on their own

in the mist.

                      Alone


10/15/2017
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© 2017 Einstein Noodle



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The video was mind-pausing and inspired - thanks man.

The poem totally captured my mind's eyes...

Posted 9 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

9 Months Ago

your reading and reviws always most welcome Chris! thank you ..and really happy you mention the vide.. read more
Maybe they were happy spinning their way into the netherworld. Together. Alone. I don't know. Facing the end with a great partner, even if deluded, is a beautiful thing. Another great poem. So simple and elegant. Cheers. CD

Posted 9 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

9 Months Ago

thanks so much CD ..so happy it sent you on that journey ... so much is simply about the dance ;)read more
Loved this
I think even without the pic your poem stands alone high looking for the performers

Posted 9 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

9 Months Ago

thank you for your kindness Julie ... i wrote the poem then went looking for the video ... and loved.. read more
was the video an inspiration? because i can see that!
this is a very interesting story, made me think. i'd say it could be interpreted a number of ways. they could be people stuck in a cycle/the past, people who are lost trying to find themselves, they could be ghosts..
i love how you left the word "they" (line 5) by itself, it emphasizes the fact that they're alone. very creative!

Posted 9 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

9 Months Ago

thank you ...i found the video after the poem ..very serendipity to find one that (i think) fits wel.. read more
a complete story in such a small space, I hear a lone harp bringing them into focus, until in silence we stare at an empty pier.

Posted 9 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

9 Months Ago

ooooooooooooooo the harp a-stringin' ...love it .. thank you so much for your heartfelt review ... w.. read more
Perhaps they were together in the separation?

Regards,
Al

Posted 9 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

9 Months Ago

perhaps they were sir ...wonder if they will ever tell us ;)
thanks so much for reading and t.. read more
Love the way you’ve used the notion of dance to convey your message

Posted 9 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

9 Months Ago

thank you for taking time simba! and nice to meet you .. did you watch the video? i think its fantas.. read more
I like the alliterations in the first part. Also the fragmented structuring, it reads nicely. As per the content, it's dreamily beautiful. A lovely read, Einstein. (:

Posted 10 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

10 Months Ago

thanks for reviewing Doc! did you watch the dancers? ;)
E.
Dr. YumnaKay

10 Months Ago

You're welcome :) tbh I'm not much into dancing videos but I watched this one just now ;) it's beaut.. read more
Einstein Noodle

10 Months Ago

every time i come back to this one i have to watch it again...i think they are superb ..water and st.. read more
That was lovely and softly magical to read, when I read the title I wasn't expecting this, but what a sweet surprise I had :) when lovers join into one, they will drift into their world, no matter where they are... I don't know but Your pair made me think of "lightning and thunder" pair :) thank You*

Posted 10 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

10 Months Ago

your impressions are so cool..i could not ask for more..thank you so much for visiting and reviewing.. read more
Light

10 Months Ago

Of course it's! You are warmly welcome :)
A fun read... we see them spin.. and wonder where and how they are.. off in a mist..hidden, showing off their talent beyond our view...

Interesting..

Jazzy

Posted 10 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

10 Months Ago

yes! one can fill in as seems right ;) or not :)) thank you again for visiting and letting me know y.. read more
J. J.  Nightingale

10 Months Ago

You are welcome !!!.................J.J...:)....

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