Alone

Alone

A Poem by Einstein Noodle
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do take the time to watch the dance video ..it is so cool...says i! ;)

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 Peering

The pair pirouettes on
                                  the pier.

The lightning wasn't quite right
             
they

couldn't quite focus on point.

I am not sure what happened to them.

They just kept spinning 

on their own

in the mist.

                      Alone


10/15/2017
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© 2017 Einstein Noodle



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Einstein Noodle

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really nice...I love the way you write and how you lay out your versed points highlighted by individual words.....and broken their by their strength although the word alone is maybe not such a powerful word....

I was criticised recently because my poems are not fit into a structure of standards poem..
but to me poetry or even just words are my art inner that I produce wit no rules and It is for no one else.....i can except comments ect .....but it's my achievement to put my emotion into words......it's not my concern if you don't like the confusion of my life you see through those words.....I'm not here to conform.

this poem is great so fast and deep and powerful....I love it my friend.

Posted 12 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

12 Months Ago

ohhh thank you so much for your encouragement ..free verse is what i am most comfortable with tho i .. read more
Wow, two ships lost in the night comes to mind here. Too bad they were unable to find each other. Short, sweet and to the point. Excellent word economy in this one, gargantuan meaning.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

12 Months Ago

spot on interpretation Karen .. thanks so much for taking time to review .. peace and joy
E.
Nice poem! Musical words and I love the ending, dramatic. Tyfs!!!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

thanks for taking time Cyprian ... did you happen to catch the video? it came after the poem but eve.. read more
Cyprian Van Dyke

1 Year Ago

I saw the video, they're really nice dancers. :)
The fun combination of "p" words at the beginning was simple and complex at the same time, great job!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

i bothered over the "p" words and in the end decided to keep them ..i appreciate you have pointed th.. read more
I adore your trippy word play. If you haven't already noticed I'm a big fan of playing with my words. I mean why not? Some of the best writing are when you let go of structure. That's when the true original form of your thoughts take action. I see so many writers fall into structure. They are rigid and prudish...scared to try anything new. And I want to ask them, why even write? It's like only drawing in back and white. Why wouldn't the artist be curious about other mediums. Words like art...can also be colorful. Well penned.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

yes...hear hear for free verse ... without any knowledge nor education it is the form i used at the .. read more
Love your play on words & the "p" sound at the beginning . . . then I really started to feel the spin & the aloneness of a solitary spin. I enjoyed your video & also (at this time of year, as the winter Olympics approach), I am an avid watcher of figure skating, which also imparts a similar spin sensation! I like the way your poetry spins my head around! *smile* Fondly Margie

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

i was not sure about the "p" sounds ..but left them ;} .. yes...its the alone i was after .. thank .. read more
Quite beautiful, both the poem and the video. Alone can be so many different things from serenity and peace to sadness and desperation. So much depends upon our perception or attitude. Bless.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

how true how true sir .. i love when i am drawn back to thisone by reviews as i watch the dancing al.. read more
And even alone can be tragically beautifully at times...the poem as moving as the video, breathtaking piece E :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

wow! thank you so much for your kind, encouraging review, Poppy ... so happy you enjoyed both :)
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Zoe
Ahh...your words as magical and tender as the dance in the video itself. Lovely poetry!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

thank you Zoe; so glad you decided to read this one .. it brings me back to it and i watch the danci.. read more
Zoe

1 Year Ago

No problem!
I've always loved the ballet, and have secretly wished I could dance like that. It is relaxing and intoxicating to watch, all at the same time. It leaves me breathless...like the words flowing here, from your pen.

I've missed you, and hope you are enjoying a wonderful autumn!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

so glad you are back dear friend! and i so appreciate your reading and reviewing always .. makes me .. read more

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an old man staving off Alzheimer's by improving my vocabulary. i suck at cross word puzzles. "He who receives an idea from me, receives instruction himself without lessening mine; as he who lights .. more..

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