Alone

do take the time to watch the dance video ..it is so cool...says i! ;)

 Peering

The pair pirouettes on

                                  the pier.

The lightning wasn't quite right

             

they

couldn't quite focus on point.

I am not sure what happened to them.

They just kept spinning 

on their own

in the mist.

                      Alone

10/15/2017

E

Author's Note

Reviews

[Silente]

Alone spinning in mist... Will be honest, am never really a fan of cut-up style presentation with poems... Yet this somehow conveyed the mist feeling in my mind... The timing it creates when read... Also exemplary... Usually it detracts, this adds... Will admit, I skimmed video, then got stuck watching because i like dancing, hah...

[Einstein Noodle]

well...how pleased i am then ...to draw you to conversion ..cut ups are my meat and potatoes ..;) and yes..the dance is intoxicating ...i have watched it over and over ...the water and stone elements is so well portrayed ..thanks Silente!
E.

[Silente]

Of course, my pleasure...

[BBP]

Romantic flow of drunken love!

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahaha yes..lets not forget the booze ;) thanks darlin' ..sure do appreciate you stopping by to read and leave your marks :)
E.

[Drowning In Reality]

Wow... Always a treat to read your poetry. The moment in time is timeless.

[Einstein Noodle]

your words are so kind..and timely .. feeling a bit blue tonight :( so happy you stopped by
E.

[Great Aunt Astri]

I like the play on the words, peer, pair and pier. Essentially we are all alone, even with our shadow. I enjoyed your poem and the video, and your interpretation.

[Einstein Noodle]

wasn't sure if it was a bit much ... so thank you Auntie ... i like the dance a lot .. Water and Stone .. so cool .. glad that you watched, read and enjoyed :) ... yeah .. funny thing the alone eh!?
E.

[Great Aunt Astri]

Water and Stone...incompatible yes, but both essential. Possibly they could be personifications of our 'soft side' and our 'hard side'. 'But as for your poem (very beautiful), although we all might be spinning on our own in the mist, we are actually never alone. We all have an 'internal world', which I am becoming to realise more and more, is full of characters and colourful entities.
Have I read too much into your poem?

[Great Aunt Astri]

PS Is Jamie a girl's name as well as a male name? Who are these dancers?

[Einstein Noodle]

i don't know much about the dancers ..went searching for something to fit my poem and found them that way ...Jamie was born in Delaware and has been involved in ballet from a very young age; i could not find a whole lot about Mikaela .. i believe they have both been involved in a Los Angeles dance studio at the same time .. not sure if they are sisters or not ...i suppose both names can be male or female ... i love you reading in ma'am ...i am an introvert myself and tend to go that way too ;)

[Great Aunt Astri]

Thanks ........:}

[Lydia]

There is something so privately romantic about your words in this one, E. A couple in the mist in love and not caring about the world....heavy sigh. The video is mesmerizing.....truly. So very lovely to read and watch. Lydi**

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you for reviewing Lydia ..really appreciate your take :) and so glad you enjoyed the video...i think it is pretty awesome as well .... peace and joy this Sunday morning ... kinda cool here today... :}
E.

[emmajoy]

Read, lost in the unravelling of your words.. and they drift like seeds and seeds on a breezy beautiful day.. truly, really, love this poem.. think i'll just lie back and dream every second of it.

What a video to go along with it.. but, in all honesty.. love the sound of your words alone, even more.

[Einstein Noodle]

how happy your review makes me ..and so glad that you enjoyed the video too ... i think it is particularly spectacular spectacular ;) that you were brought in and held in the poem is more than i could ask for in a reader ..thank you always for your visits and for your words concerning this one ..big thank you again emma!
E.

[emmajoy]

You know i only say what i think... and, dear friend, I have.

[Einstein Noodle]

i think you are a beautiful soul ..and admirable writer/poetess ... and of course honest .. thank you again

[Pragati Chaudhary]

It left like the words are stumbling and falling :D

Lovely notion!

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you for taking time my new friend! i appreciate it!
E.

[An owl on the moon]

I wandered the words slowly, with the music playing. How beautifully painful it seemed, with the shadows of the dance all around them, the spinning, the movement, yet somehow disconnected. Together and yet alone. Breathtaking.

[Einstein Noodle]

God bless you my friend...so gratified you played the music and watched the dance as well ... really happy you enjoyed that whole experience ..thank you so much my friend!!!
E.

[An owl on the moon]

It's always a joy to visit your world, my friend. Always! :)

[Moon's fairest daughter..]

I like how the last word adds more depth to the poem, makes us focus on their relationship...they seem so happy, pirouetting and dancing, but even when together, each of them can't help but feel lonely...

[Einstein Noodle]

yep! it was a last thought to repeat the title in closing ... sometimes it works and sometimes not .. thank you for pointing it out ... i kind of like it that way as well ;) your review reflects your sensitivity Moon ... thats exactly what i am trying to convey
E.

[wordman]

it all blended well,enjoyed the read

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks wordman ..did you get a chance to watch the video? its pretty cool i think ... you might enjoy it too.
E.

[wordman]

i did watch it

[wordman]

well i did see it,and yes it is pretty cool my friend

[Einstein Noodle]

:) ...............