Alone

Alone

A Poem by Einstein Noodle
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do take the time to watch the dance video ..it is so cool...says i! ;)

"
 Peering

The pair pirouettes on
                                  the pier.

The lightning wasn't quite right
             
they

couldn't quite focus on point.

I am not sure what happened to them.

They just kept spinning 

on their own

in the mist.

                      Alone


10/15/2017
E

© 2017 Einstein Noodle



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Alone spinning in mist... Will be honest, am never really a fan of cut-up style presentation with poems... Yet this somehow conveyed the mist feeling in my mind... The timing it creates when read... Also exemplary... Usually it detracts, this adds... Will admit, I skimmed video, then got stuck watching because i like dancing, hah...

Posted 2 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

well...how pleased i am then ...to draw you to conversion ..cut ups are my meat and potatoes ..;) an.. read more
Silente

2 Months Ago

Of course, my pleasure...
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Romantic flow of drunken love!

Posted 2 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

ahahaha yes..lets not forget the booze ;) thanks darlin' ..sure do appreciate you stopping by to rea.. read more
Wow... Always a treat to read your poetry. The moment in time is timeless.

Posted 2 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

your words are so kind..and timely .. feeling a bit blue tonight :( so happy you stopped by
E.. read more
I like the play on the words, peer, pair and pier. Essentially we are all alone, even with our shadow. I enjoyed your poem and the video, and your interpretation.

Posted 2 Months Ago


Great Aunt Astri

2 Months Ago

PS Is Jamie a girl's name as well as a male name? Who are these dancers?
Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

i don't know much about the dancers ..went searching for something to fit my poem and found them tha.. read more
Great Aunt Astri

2 Months Ago

Thanks ........:}
There is something so privately romantic about your words in this one, E. A couple in the mist in love and not caring about the world....heavy sigh. The video is mesmerizing.....truly. So very lovely to read and watch. Lydi**

Posted 2 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

thank you for reviewing Lydia ..really appreciate your take :) and so glad you enjoyed the video...i.. read more
Read, lost in the unravelling of your words.. and they drift like seeds and seeds on a breezy beautiful day.. truly, really, love this poem.. think i'll just lie back and dream every second of it.

What a video to go along with it.. but, in all honesty.. love the sound of your words alone, even more.

Posted 3 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Months Ago

how happy your review makes me ..and so glad that you enjoyed the video too ... i think it is partic.. read more
emmajoy

3 Months Ago

You know i only say what i think... and, dear friend, I have.
Einstein Noodle

3 Months Ago

i think you are a beautiful soul ..and admirable writer/poetess ... and of course honest .. thank yo.. read more
It left like the words are stumbling and falling :D

Lovely notion!

Posted 3 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Months Ago

thank you for taking time my new friend! i appreciate it!
E.
I wandered the words slowly, with the music playing. How beautifully painful it seemed, with the shadows of the dance all around them, the spinning, the movement, yet somehow disconnected. Together and yet alone. Breathtaking.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

3 Months Ago

God bless you my friend...so gratified you played the music and watched the dance as well ... really.. read more
An owl on the moon

3 Months Ago

It's always a joy to visit your world, my friend. Always! :)
I like how the last word adds more depth to the poem, makes us focus on their relationship...they seem so happy, pirouetting and dancing, but even when together, each of them can't help but feel lonely...

Posted 3 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Months Ago

yep! it was a last thought to repeat the title in closing ... sometimes it works and sometimes not ... read more
it all blended well,enjoyed the read

Posted 3 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Months Ago

thanks wordman ..did you get a chance to watch the video? its pretty cool i think ... you might enjo.. read more
 wordman

3 Months Ago

i did watch it

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