Alone

Alone

A Poem by Einstein Noodle
"

do take the time to watch the dance video ..it is so cool...says i! ;)

"
 Peering

The pair pirouettes on
                                  the pier.

The lightning wasn't quite right
             
they

couldn't quite focus on point.

I am not sure what happened to them.

They just kept spinning 

on their own

in the mist.

                      Alone


10/15/2017
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© 2017 Einstein Noodle



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Wow, how can few words delicately paint moving pictures in the reader's mind? I love it. Keep up! :)

Posted 9 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

9 Months Ago

thanks Cookie! nice to meet you! '69 was a very good year ;) glad you enjoyed the dance ... i will s.. read more
CookieMisfit1969

9 Months Ago

You're always welcome around here :)
A lovely, flowing dance of a piece that uses such atmosphere to create an image in so few words. Sublimely done fellow says I!

Posted 9 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

9 Months Ago

ahahahaha thank you says i! glad you enjoyed the read ... your review gave me a fine chuckle for the.. read more
Forgot points! Now they’re in at 100! :)

Posted 9 Months Ago


Great alliteration, original form, lovely flow- lines dropping off like dancers dropping off the pier into the mist...hauntingly beautiful imagery of each dancer isolated- not making contact. “The lighting wasn’t quite right”- yes, relationship out of focus. Just..can’t..connect.. Great poem E.!

Posted 9 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

9 Months Ago

so glad you saw the scene and felt it ..most appreciated Annette! ... and thank you for the points ... read more
What a wonderful series of images you have conjured up for me....Perpetual motion, wrapped in mist, super. Thank you E N

Posted 9 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

9 Months Ago

thank you so much Neville ... so happy the conjuring worked for you ... i feel pretty gratified my f.. read more
Neville Pettitt

9 Months Ago

My pleasure mate
Adulation, and i suppose, consolation. Not very good bedfellows. But life is like that. Every great dancer needs a lesser dancer to make them shine.

Posted 9 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

9 Months Ago

thank you for taking time Paul! i had not thought of one of the dancers being lesser ... but certain.. read more
A sad poem, profound and deep. Indeed when the lightning isn't right, they'll just keep spinning in the mist on their own, alone. Its a lonely future, a charade for the two. Loved it!

Posted 9 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

9 Months Ago

exactly my friend...thank you so much for your read and review ... so happy the emptiness came throu.. read more

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Einstein Noodle
Einstein Noodle

Pork Rind, AK



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an old man staving off Alzheimer's by improving my vocabulary. i suck at cross word puzzles. "He who receives an idea from me, receives instruction himself without lessening mine; as he who lights .. more..

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