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Neighborhood Watch

Neighborhood Watch

A Poem by Einstein Noodle
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I am curious to know if the video makes a difference in the impressions you get from the poem.

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Neighborhood Watch


Scorching empty ocean floors
Like crmbling bones

A lifetime waiting as
Vapors inside the dropper

Black rubber bulb
Never touched and

One drop collects .....
I squeeze          it          out

Sands an arid sponge 
take it
dissipate
dehydrate ... 

A large heart aches and

The hood .............. 

watches and
wonders.


12/06/2017
E.

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© 2017 Einstein Noodle



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very strong imagery and power in your well chosen words knitted with a fine touch. you've combined words that one would never expect to go together into something meaningful as it labors to drive home your theme. something has gone amiss as we finally arrive at a stark revelation. i think we've all been there feeling like the proverbial deer in the headlights. we're all in this together? what affects one, affects all perhaps?

"There is no remedy for love but to love more." - Thoreau

Posted 5 Months Ago


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Einstein Noodle

5 Months Ago

thanks for reading and reviewing Pete ... i much appreciate your time taken ... another powerful Tho.. read more



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very strong imagery and power in your well chosen words knitted with a fine touch. you've combined words that one would never expect to go together into something meaningful as it labors to drive home your theme. something has gone amiss as we finally arrive at a stark revelation. i think we've all been there feeling like the proverbial deer in the headlights. we're all in this together? what affects one, affects all perhaps?

"There is no remedy for love but to love more." - Thoreau

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

5 Months Ago

thanks for reading and reviewing Pete ... i much appreciate your time taken ... another powerful Tho.. read more
dear E... the Deer watch and wonder in your photo... I will listen to the Foo Fighters and especially when they sing Pretender. We moved to a very large home built in 1988 with a master bedroom with a huge window that is like an Observatory where clusters of Stars meet to observe and give guidance... I am certain. We were blessed with divine guidance. Amen truly, Pat

Posted 5 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Months Ago

thank you so much for stopping again and to listen to the music ;) sounds like a wonderful view thro.. read more
dear E... I feel the stars above and their guidance... a dance of beauty and love
Always, Pat

Posted 5 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Months Ago

mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm yes...those stars can lead us to better mental and emotional health can't they ... read more
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Your poetry is impressive. I like the poem paired with the music video. You write at heights (not depths, as many say) I'm not sure I'll ever reach. So, my interpretation is probably much different than the origins in your head.

What I take away is the message that life is fleeting. The richest, purest "drops" are few, and though rich, often leave us unfulfilled. Still, we're here together, bonded in humanity, enduring together. Thanks for sharing, and for exercising my brain this morning.


Posted 7 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Months Ago

thank you Robert ..i am humbled by your encouragement...i think i was 4 feet 11 inches until i turne.. read more
favor returned is it suppose to be "like crumbling bones"? when a couple fights it can get pretty noisy, everyone can usually see and hear them and the deer pic is awesome, neighbor hood eyes are like stars, countless witnesses to the death of love, eyes are dry, no more tears to spill, the well has gone dry, you sqeeze out one more for the good old days. or I dont understand it at all and the video didnt help one bit XD but it was still trippy fun to read XD


Posted 7 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Months Ago

thanks Corset ... mostly about giving and how it seems so little compared to the consuming .. i like.. read more
Corset

7 Months Ago

backatcha!
In this piece, your imagination is about six light years beyond my own. I love your "out-there" imagery, even if I'm not sure what it all means. Mystic writers like you have taught me not to expect meaning, as sometimes it's all about the sensations of the ride *smile* Here's wishing you & your loved ones a joyous & love-filled Christmas! (((HUGS))) Fondly Margie

Posted 7 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Months Ago

spot on Margie ..and i am doubly thankful you take the trouble to discover ..many would just pass by.. read more
barleygirl

7 Months Ago

That was truly your best share of all time, between the two of us. I was transfixed as I read the wh.. read more
Einstein Noodle

7 Months Ago

yes!!! exactly so ..tweeked not overhauled ..i hear the poets anthem in that :)
Nice write! I like how it ends, "watches and wonders". Tyfs!!! The poem is short simple and poetic.

Posted 7 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Months Ago

thanks you for reading, Cyprian ... and the encouraging words ...
E.
love is sometimes like a drug that destroys us when we abuse it...
and others watch as we take it too often, but they cannot help...we have to do that on our own...find our own balance in relationships---
this is like Hemingway...it's like what isn't there is as important as what is.

j.

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

8 Months Ago

thank you for reviewing jacob...i am truly humbled a bit by the connections you made in reading this.. read more
Neighborhoods destroyed by the ravages of drugs or illicit gains and all those addicts are getting high and make the sky their neighborhood with lights and sounds heightened in their heads. An outstanding write, sir Einstein.

Posted 8 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

8 Months Ago

always grateful for your sensitive and thorough reads Sami .. thanks so much for taking time
.. read more
Sami Khalil

8 Months Ago

You are welcome, sir.
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BBP
Taking acid..........


Thats my interpretation.

Posted 8 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

8 Months Ago

ahahahaha yeah...could be no doubt .. thanks so much for taking time and reviewing BB ... peace, lov.. read more

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