Neighborhood Watch

Neighborhood Watch

A Poem by Einstein Noodle
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I am curious to know if the video makes a difference in the impressions you get from the poem.

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Neighborhood Watch


Scorching empty ocean floors
Like crmbling bones

A lifetime waiting as
Vapors inside the dropper

Black rubber bulb
Never touched and

One drop collects .....
I squeeze          it          out

Sands an arid sponge 
take it
dissipate
dehydrate ... 

A large heart aches and

The hood .............. 

watches and
wonders.


12/06/2017
E.

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© 2017 Einstein Noodle



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very strong imagery and power in your well chosen words knitted with a fine touch. you've combined words that one would never expect to go together into something meaningful as it labors to drive home your theme. something has gone amiss as we finally arrive at a stark revelation. i think we've all been there feeling like the proverbial deer in the headlights. we're all in this together? what affects one, affects all perhaps?

"There is no remedy for love but to love more." - Thoreau

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Einstein Noodle

2 Months Ago

thanks for reading and reviewing Pete ... i much appreciate your time taken ... another powerful Tho.. read more



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Well, I don't think the video is the one you originally put up , it's Foo Fighters- The Sky is a Neighborhood. And the poem? I am afraid it is a bit obscure for me to understand. I am not sure what the references are. Except that I do see the despair of the aching heart. And the neighbourhood watches on helplessly?

Posted 5 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Months Ago

thank you Auntie..for your honest impressions ..it is a little nebulous .. you are right... the vide.. read more
Great Aunt Astri

5 Months Ago

Oh, so it was the right video, with the music upstairs and the little girls floating about. Einstein.. read more
Einstein Noodle

5 Months Ago

i will try Auntie .. and message you
You are my sunshine, my only sunshine
You make me happy when skies are gray
You'll never know dear, how much I love you
Please don't take my sunshine away.................

I'll take another bite, sip another sip...
soon the water will be poison, and the sun
our lifelong friend, shall dehydrate us to gone..
refusing to consider lives .. wearing mask and rose colored glasses..we march on to our dooms....
forgetting we are all in this together..............

Oh, I usually don't play the videos on poems...

Of course this is my take on your timely poem..
May be way off course............

Interesting/Timely/Thought Provoking

Jazzy.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Months Ago

Jazzy! thaks for your poetic response ..spot on for sure ..and I am tickled you went ahead and watch.. read more
J. J.  Nightingale

5 Months Ago

You are welcome E.... ..:).................Jazzy
Adults have become naughty children.. when they've finished with their toys, they throw them against a wall or take them to pieces... and that's what's happened to Human Beings versus our planet.

Human UNkind has been destroying a garden they thought would never die or, perhaps because of petty mindedmess, thought was made from cutprice plastic. Your words reinforce those of us who holds their world on par with just a few of those who work to keep its magic, its wonder.

Meantime, we're being smothered by our own disregard for everything near by and around us. We're losing our right and our place in Space Society.

More than a fine write, more than a heart that weeps..

Posted 5 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Months Ago

:) ..........................
emmajoy

5 Months Ago

Been worried for you, hope well.. .. Catch you soon, soup's on the simmer.. Stay well as.. please.
Einstein Noodle

5 Months Ago

thank you emma! all's well here ... gonna go grab some granola me self presently ..bon appetite!
A top write Einstein. We tend to look away at these atrocities with nature’s destruction or like a helpless neighbour we just watch in our apathy.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Months Ago

thank you andrew...how true .. i read an article a long time ago that stuck with me about large citi.. read more
This is stark and all the more wonderful for that. It is as some say despairing. Perhaps that despair changes something. This poem seems to me to say, I think not.
Excellent and thoughful, intelligent and meaningful.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Months Ago

thank you Ken for your kind words and encouragement .. i had a lot of thoughts swirling ;) thank goo.. read more
The hood, the woods, the earth, the hunted- like deer in the headlights. Earth is raped and Mean streets make a Savage Garden. Stark, graphic poem that brilliantly illustrates despair and apathy incarnate. “Dissipate, dehydrate”- yes, death happens, but nobody and nothing changes on the block. Superb write E.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Annette Pisano-Higley

5 Months Ago

You are right E, tis I When I finally arrived in Florida from such a long drive! Forgive my green in.. read more
Einstein Noodle

5 Months Ago

i kinda like 'em :)
Annette Pisano-Higley

5 Months Ago

Thanks!:):)
Such desperation and a feeling of despair runs through this piece..the hood seems to be stuck in a rut same old same old..day in.. day out....the vapors in stillness caught.. waiting for something .. anything .. better to come their way.. to break the meager and mundane.exiistance..wondering will it happen...great pen E..

Posted 5 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Months Ago

thanks so much for visiting Fran ... love your thoughts on this ... seems we just can't learn the le.. read more
  Fran Marie

5 Months Ago

+ Merry Christmas +
This could be someone who actually lived in the neighbourhood all their lives. Just watching life go by. Also got the sands of time running through it.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Months Ago

sure could be ..thanks so much Paul! thank you for taking time and pondering with me a little
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I read poem, checked out the picture, and watched the vid.

What I am coming up with, and I could be wrong here, is we are part of a universal family, and at the moment we are doing a very poor job in regards to managing natural resources and ourselves.

The scorched sands has an apocalyptic feel, while waiting like vapours in a dropper suggests missed opportunities. The watching and wondering seems to fit in well with this idea, as it is an excuse for doing nothing?

Great poem, big meaning!


Posted 5 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Months Ago

yes to all that Karen..thank you for such a thorough and sensitive reading ..did the vid make any di.. read more
Hi You :)

Firstly, the Internet is so bad here in Copacabana I'm not even going to attempt to open that video - even if it is the Fooey's who I love so much!

So I have read this through a couple of times and coming to my own conclusions which are probably so far left of thought they are wrong. - Happens to me a lot.

Then the photo has thrown me right out into the woods of no return.

Your first t so lines caught me and held me there because for me I wouldn't have used the word ocean to go in with your descrioption. For me an ocean is not scorched unless we are talking apocalyptic - then that's a different matter. Reading through the rest of the poem I am wondering if the desert could be scorched? It seems to fit with your chosen word choices down the lines? Hmmm just a thought.

I am looking forward to the explanation here - you do like writing about the hood in one way or another X

Posted 5 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Months Ago

yes...scorched scorched scorched everything ;) i am honored my dear freind of freinds that you took .. read more

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