Standing Stone

Standing Stone

A Poem by Einstein Noodle

the privacy of her expectations

kept 
those things hidden tight  
                  I
pushed them into compression locks, she
squeezing shut and squinted yet
still oozing her secrets; it
couldn't be helped

in hieroglyphic mazes we bleed our ignorance

Tell me darling!            Please!                    I beg

standing  stupor with a pick- shovel 
and sifter ....shaking ... ever shaking 
through the debris  to glimpse
some bit of
understanding
            
never settling
honestly ........... tombs of the ancients are an easier task

01/24/2018
E.




© 2018 Einstein Noodle



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This is a deeply moving and personal journey written in a unique dramatic format- i can easily hear this as a spoken poem...a lover with the object of his love figuratively entombed by her secrets, expectations and emotional debris- and he trying to dig her out literally and figuratively. Brilliant metaphor. Eloquent and poignant words reveal unbearable
undercurrents of pain and frustration. I concur, a most formidable and long- suffering task to endeavor. I hope that luck, strength and infinite understanding prevail for this poor protagonist. Great write my friend!


Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

3 Weeks Ago

God bless you for your very understanding read of this..and thank you so much for pointing out what .. read more
Annette Pisano Higley

3 Weeks Ago

Your poem touched my heart E. Blessings and light wished back to you.:)



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It is evident from the positive remarks left by my many reviewing predecessors that these words resonate with so very many of us and on so many different levels. This is another one of your poems that must be consigned to my personal favourites. Thank you dear friend for sharing......................N

Posted 2 Days Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Day Ago

thank you Neville .. i am gratified and humbled it goes into your favorites ...yes ... lots of room .. read more
Neville Pettitt

1 Day Ago

I know that feeling well..Oh and my pleasure...N
E, You are a pro at writing poetry! How vividly you describe the frustrations of a lover at the secrecy of her expectations! If she keeps her expectations hidden, that is because she doesn't want her expectations to become your limitations!

Posted 3 Days Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Days Ago

:) thank you for your kind review Mrudula! yeah...pretty frustrating eh!? ;{ glad you found this one.. read more
Mrudula Rani

3 Days Ago

It's entirely my pleasure.
some people hide so well....had an ex like this...she just couldn't trust enough to open up...and when she finally left, her secrets went with her...interestingly we still see each other and talk on the phone at times...and now she is much ore open...and often says she wishes she hadn't been so angry and mistrusting back then...

j.

Posted 1 Week Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Week Ago

you feel me then jacob...those relationships are doomed ...when one's "secret room" is 98% of the ma.. read more
As a person with tons of baggage buried deeply, I can very much relate to being on the receiving end of this message! I bet one or two of my suitors over the years were feeling a lot like this. Sometimes it's just a moth that cannot be captured *sigh!* Always love your unique way of describing universal situations (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Weeks Ago

boy do i appreciate you reading and reviewing this one especially Margie...because i see you as a ve.. read more
Your words wonderful, demanding and worthwhile. You made the reader feel and understand the words and the emotions.
"in hieroglyphic mazes we bleed our ignorance
Tell me darling! Please! I beg"
The above lines. So damn good my friend. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Weeks Ago

wow! Coyote!!! i feel very gratified by your remarks ..because i read in your poetry that you are a .. read more
Coyote Poetry

4 Days Ago

I liked this poem and you are welcome my friend.
Fascinating and multi layered. The reader can approach this in so many ways but I prefer to see it through the shadows of my own experience.
A remarkable piece of thoroughly intelligent writing.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Weeks Ago

Conas atá tú? ;) what a happy man i am at your visit my friend ...i need to stop by your place and.. read more
"squeezing shut and squinted yet
still oozing her secrets" - oh i wish i'd written this description. it's - well you can taste it, see it, feel it. It's visceral.

love the imagery of ancient egypt in there; a metaphor for secrets and censors and lost truths.
beautiful.
agree too that i'd love to hear it spoken out loud.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Weeks Ago

thank you my new friend! i know that you "feel" this one ...we have some similar inner cores i think.. read more
One of your best. I like it so much.
Lower your expectations, lower your surprises.
Keep secrets hidden, keep the peace.
Undertsand the other's wants and needs, stay in the just balance.
Point out past or current mistakes, get the bees nest.
Write a wonderful poem, get great review.



Posted 2 Weeks Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Weeks Ago

wow Sami!! so humbled...truly ...by your remarks ..i appreciate all your visits ..isn't it crazy how.. read more
Sami Khalil

2 Weeks Ago

So True. You are welcome...
Personal interaction is often metaphysical . Poetry is often metaphorical. Searching for understanding depends on scaling the barriers. I hope I have navigated the complex maze of words here, E. in my interpretation of your poem..... N.:)

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Weeks Ago

yep ... certainly can be all that indeed ... perhaps why we have so much fun at it ;) oh those barri.. read more
This is intense, yet bleeds with wanting to be soften, and it's soft at times, like a summer's sea waves, holding a kind of warmth, the poem is like a wave, changing from feeling to another due to the more than one state it carries, the urging from You, the caring loving urging from You that takes a ride on anger when it seems it has no response to, I think of those who are drawn in their situations thinking no one cares, and they believe so, might even turns into stones, but we know inside they are gentle, they just hide safe (that's what they think off) inside that tough shell, it might be hard to break it and make them get out, but we shouldn't stop because we care about them, and it might takes only a moment when we will see them laying their hand to us.

this poem holds speciality and shows Your true loving nature, Your strength, in a unquie way.
Happy Weekend for You Mr. Loving E!

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Weeks Ago

thank you so much for you very kind words Light...and for taking time to really get into this poem ... read more

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