What was it .

What was it .

A Poem by the_stoic

a small crime was it
to expect a bit of care
for i gave you my all.

a small error was it
to never neglect anyone
for i always responded in time.

a small fault was it
to let emotions run freely
for i only heard - i won't, i can't.

a small mistake was it
to think that you'll hold me
for i am as alone as ever.

a small lapse was it
to not take my mind off you
for i am sinking in.

a small slip was it
to forget my past 
for i am sensing deja vu.

a small blunder was it
to love you dear lady
for i am pitied in return...

© 2012 the_stoic


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A poem written by a wronged lover. It amounts to a controlled list of incriminating statements against an ex partner. The repeated ironic use of 'small' (presumably with an opposite meaning for his lover) sets the tone with the poet accusing her of a lack of support, understanding, sensitivity, etc. I think the poem gets its strength from its control - If emotion wasn't reigned in, it might be a howl of protest - and from the way the argument convinces with its emotional directness. I think this is very strong writing.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

the_stoic

11 Years Ago

thank you so much for your in depth analysis sir ! Glad to hear from you :)
John

11 Years Ago

You're very welcome. Glad to come across such a fine piece of work.
the_stoic

11 Years Ago

You can check out some other ones too sir :)



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A poem written by a wronged lover. It amounts to a controlled list of incriminating statements against an ex partner. The repeated ironic use of 'small' (presumably with an opposite meaning for his lover) sets the tone with the poet accusing her of a lack of support, understanding, sensitivity, etc. I think the poem gets its strength from its control - If emotion wasn't reigned in, it might be a howl of protest - and from the way the argument convinces with its emotional directness. I think this is very strong writing.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

the_stoic

11 Years Ago

thank you so much for your in depth analysis sir ! Glad to hear from you :)
John

11 Years Ago

You're very welcome. Glad to come across such a fine piece of work.
the_stoic

11 Years Ago

You can check out some other ones too sir :)

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Added on August 23, 2012
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Tags: crime, punishment, hate, pain, anguish, death

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the_stoic

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