Lost

Lost

A Poem by the_stoic
"

wandering in oblivion after losing the battle for the 'one' i had so dearly sought

"
How difficult nowadays life seems
The rigmarole i once hated , now feels like a dream .

In this heart of mine once there was light
As i had hopes pinned on my last fight .

Time and again I bared my all to endure the whip
Yet good times always somehow managed to give me a slip .

Now as darkness engulfs the horizon , the outcome is almost clear
The battle is almost lost , a painful fact that i have to bear .

I might feel satisfied cause with all my strength i fought
But the horrifying outcome will always unsettle me as i lost my precious , the one i had so dearly sought ...

May be i missed the quintessential kick that was needed for a start
Or maybe lady luck never came by to play her much needed part .

Whatever be the reason , the outcome makes me feel wrought
Coupled with the painful reminders that it has with itself brought .

"Life is all about going on" thou may say
But is it truly a 'LYF' if i could never have it my own way ???

© 2010 the_stoic


Author's Note

the_stoic
'LYF' is written that way purposely . so don't consider it as a lingo error

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Good poem bro. I guess you have experienced things which make your poems brutal discoveries of yourself. You always write from your heart everytime. I hope life finds a way to heal you.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I think this was a good poem. I agree with Judi she is correct. This was good though. Thanks for sharing. :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


I believe anyone can change and make youir live what you desire. Just make your needs known and respect for those wishes will follow. ~ Judi

Posted 13 Years Ago


Great……
I have no tears left to cry for you…
Stoic…
Pain can give birth to a real poet


Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

very emotive full of reason very nice write well done

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

It was a really good poem. Very well and beautifully written. I especially liked the line " In this heart of mine once there was light as i had hopes pinned on my last fight ." Very powerful. Keep it up. ^__^

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I am showing my age a bit- what's an LYF? ...LOL...Anyways- here is some constructive advice... The poem had many good points and was heartfelt. It also had a few problems. Some of the content suffers because of the need to rhyme. I'm not sure if text lingo should be in poetry. that is purely MY opinion- it might be just my age. But I do understand tragedy of the subject matter. maybe a re-write is in order?

Posted 13 Years Ago


It was a good poem. I enjoyed reading it. It's not your best but some of it didn't flow perfectly. Other than that, I thought it was a good topic and good in general.

Posted 13 Years Ago


hmm, not exactly my favorite, but a well done poem in all.

Posted 13 Years Ago


This was sailing smoothly until the end, I have to say.. The last stanza just didn't fit in (Again, it might just be me!). All the other stanzas are perfect :) (Well, seems like you won't give up on killing the language, lol). Keep writing.

Posted 13 Years Ago



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