What is it ?

sometimes i just ask myself ..

What is it that you couldn't stay in my heart ?

Now that you are leaving , I just want to tear it apart .

What is it that you bring to the fore ?

I am restless , shaken right up to the core .

What is it that your memories conjure ?

They won't let me sleep , making me an insomniac for sure .

What is it that will bring you back to me ?

Even if it's my demise then grant it, that's my plea ...

Reviews

[Abdul Aziz]

Very well written.
I can see this either as a write of desperation, or a write of longing.

It is as if you are asking yourself, "was she worth it?" . And it also feels like you are asking her "Why are you leaving me?"

The last couplet tilts the balance more in favor of the latter view though.

Very well written. I liked reading it!

[clauds294]

You show such emotion in your poems! Love this one so much.
"What is it that will bring you back to me ?
Even if it's my demise then grant it, that's my plea ..."

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

Yes, indeed this is very well written. I really like this. Brilliant and beautiful. Thanks for sharing. :)

[*** Hey Jude***]

I would hope someone that cares for you would never want to be a part of your demise. Your plea is heard, finally! ~ Judi :-)

[An owl on the moon]

You speak so vividly of a heart's longing and pain in letting go.. Could relate so well to the questions and the emotion... Powerfully written with darkly painted strokes.

[Lydia Blackwell]

I like the way the poem is set up. It is simple but has real depth of emotion and thought. great write.

[JENY]

Wow…
Your lines cause bleeding in the minds of the reader…
Stoic….please stop lashing us readers with pain filled lines….
Your words are very powerful….
That no reader can help feeling sad…
While going through it…….

but I hate the photo...

[Liza]

very profound expression!

[Solitary Dreamer]

I know exactly how you feel

[Fallacy Pharmacy]

Beautifully written, versed, and rhymed. Full emotion and anger, I love this poem.

[mis wa photozoid]

i can relate.
well versed