Tinkerbelle

Tinkerbelle

A Poem by Shalini R

My dog likes to sit in

Sun-puddles

And splash around in the light.

She curls up in slivers of

Wrinkled sun coming through the door

Squinting into the day

That she cannot have.  

She ravels that unseen spiral

Twists and contorts herself

To a perfect state of

Unprodded peace. 

 

© 2008 Shalini R


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Lovely, especially the imagery. Seriously good stuff,

"My dog likes to sit in
Sun-puddles
And splash around in the light."

I love how this presents a dog sitting in a puddle and splashing around, but the real image you present is the dog running around in the sun. Great contrast there.

Thanks for entering my contest!

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Lovely, especially the imagery. Seriously good stuff,

"My dog likes to sit in
Sun-puddles
And splash around in the light."

I love how this presents a dog sitting in a puddle and splashing around, but the real image you present is the dog running around in the sun. Great contrast there.

Thanks for entering my contest!

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

nice.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Great poem. This paints a nice, vivid picture. I can relate, as I love my dog just about more than anything... if not just more. :P Thanks for entering the contest. Best of luck to you in it!
KH

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

to find the perfect spot and then remain...i can so see this..love the sun images..thank you~john

Posted 16 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Awww I love Tinkerbelle!
Aside from that, this is a beautiful poem. I like the line, "She ravels that unseen spiral". It makes me think of her jumping around in circles chasing her tail.

Posted 17 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

I really like the way you talk about the sun. "Wrinkled sun coming through the door" My fave line.

Posted 17 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

cool poem.

Posted 17 Years Ago


1 of 3 people found this review constructive.

I ACTUALLY COULD SEE MY PUPS SUNBATHING UNDER THE CURTAINS WITH THIS WRITE THANK YOU VERY WELL DONE THIS WAS THE LINE I LIKED BESTWrinkled sun coming through the door
Squinting into the day
THANKS-RYAN

Posted 17 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

I liked this, very well done. :)


Geist

Posted 17 Years Ago


2 of 3 people found this review constructive.


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Shalini R
Shalini R

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