When You Left

I wrote this poem for my best friend , for my soul " Reeham"

I wish you could know, what you've done to me

You left a giant hole in my heart, in my chest

An emptiness that no one can fill by presence

I wish you could know, what you have done to me

You caused a deep wound in my soul

That won't heal nor stop whining

When I hear your name, the salty memories

Leak through the cuts , triggering its wounds

The notes of sorrow play hard on my vines

I wish you could know, what you have done

 

They say a friend in need is a friend indeed

And I need you so much

I long for talking to you, holding you

Sharing with you … My hopes, my dreams

, my pains and my fears

I wish you could know, what you have done

Every night since you left

My tears meet and sing

The song of fear, the fear of losing a friend

I know it's not your fault nor mine

It's just our fate that made us a part

You promised me to stay friends

No matter what the distance is

But believe me my sweet angel

When you're gone

Life makes no sense any more

The roses are crying their lost odor

The birds lost their voices and their glamor

I wish you could know, what you have done

I need you so much, I miss you even more

Though I have many friends to live with

But you are the only one I wish

Tell me please can a body live without its breeze

Its soul , its quintessence

No it can't , it won't …

Reviews

[Akshita]

It's such a beautiful beautiful write...your words feel like sad music...especially because they are from your heart...
"When I hear your name, the salty memories
Leak through the cuts , triggering its wounds
The notes of sorrow play hard on my vines"
These lines were really really touching...I loved them, I loved your poem...

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

Ohhhhhhh i am so glad that you loved my poem , its amazing !
i just miss her so much !

[Akshita]

I understand....I just hope your void fills up soon :)

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

I hope that too ^_^ thank you for your kindness :)

[MaryOwais]

I really loved this piece. I believe it has genuine feelings.
I admire how you used the method of writing to let things off your chest.
Hope you are feeling better by now :)

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

Yes i do now thank you :)

[Deron Alexis]

wow this is way cool really it was intense emotional and full of feeling longing really well done my friend

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

Thank you my friend i really miss you n:)

[Deron Alexis]

yeah stuff is a bit busy so you may see me less

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

me too :)

[Annabelle Lee]

wow.

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

Thank you :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A lovely sad poem Hadeel. So full of pathos.

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

thanks :)

[Frieda P]

Precious and sad read, speaks of such loneliness and longing. Nicely pen'd.

The birds lost their voices and their glamor

Such a sweet line.....

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

Thank you :-)

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Very real write...painfully loving in its nature...
some people leave are meant to be close, and loss of such is painful indeed...

great write :D

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

Thanx yas :)

[BL]

Very sad and also very real, full of the bitter sweet emotions of loss, that only fade over time.

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

Thank you :)

[Jack...]

Very sad and filled with a longing, it eats at you and takes your mind places it no longer wants to go. Nice

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

Yeah its hard to feel that your best friend is no longer beside you , thanks jack :)

[khalid]

very nicely penned. as a person who is living on this planet, in this culture, you will marry one day too and then you will have your own family, different intrests and companions, that is life..im sure you know she is happier after she got married, if you were the one who married first you would feel the same..what i want to say..just take it easy. life is still going on..

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

Maybe :) thanks khalid

[khalid]

welcome

[PurpleQuartz]

It's never easy being parted from a friend. This poem was sweet and sorrowful, you wrote from the heart and that makes a most truly precious write.

[Hadeel ( Charming Fairy )]

Thank you so much , i did write it by my heart :)