Beringia

Beringia

A Poem by Hailey Juliet
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65.8938° N, 168.3954° W

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would that i could cross that gaping chasm
on waves or wanton whims
to rest atop a frozen crest
with you
two cold birds perched abreast

to stare back across that vast expanse
and merge coastlines in our memory
reminisce of what was and will
be still
and stay 
and wait

follow aurora in perpetuity
that scintillating osculation
hypnotic dance of star and horizon
intimate and wholly uncertain . . .

avast! and stay.
be still.
and wait?
  too late

to reprise that gaping chasm
on a whim or pang of regret,
to indemnify that pound of flesh
as yet
left reluctantly in debt.





© 2018 Hailey Juliet



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Ooooh, this is so perfect! What talent! Your timing, phrasing and word choices are to die for! I love it bringing me back to classic Romantic writers. Also, your writing reminded me of my time in college (northern Minnesota) and how cold and luminescent the frosty landscape was. I thought the merging coastlines was just brilliant. I love your moving metaphor of birds and landscapes to play the drama and love in this relationship. Your piece ebbed and flowed in all the right places.. You have a skillful mastery of written word, and I can't wait to see more!!

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Hailey Juliet

8 Months Ago

Thank you Alexa, I really appreciate the generous review and the thoughts you shared!



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Your wordplay is beautiful and full of depth!
"...to reprise that gaping chasm
on a whim or pang of regret,
to indemnify that pound of flesh
as yet
left reluctantly in debt."
I can really resonate with your writing.

Posted 8 Months Ago


Hailey Juliet

8 Months Ago

Thank you:)
I read the first line and though, "holy f**k."
The way you build your stanzas is phenomenal. You have a lot of raw natural talent here, which goes without saying (but I'll say it anyway).
So, usually, when people use really memorable and (for lack of better term) larger words, it usually comes off pretentious and forced; in this case it seemed incredibly appropriate and attractive. I feel like I can reach out and touch your mind and that it would be warm and brilliant.
Anyway, you're an uncut diamond.

Posted 8 Months Ago


Hailey Juliet

8 Months Ago

Why thank you, much appreciated read and review:)
wow, this is...wow. The wordplay is flawless, I just write in blocks but you make the spacing transform and give life into the poem. The best part for me was "avast! and stay.
be still.
and wait?
too late"
thanks for sharing.

Posted 8 Months Ago


Hailey Juliet

8 Months Ago

Thank you for the read and review:)
'.. merge coastlines in our memory ~ reminisce of what was and will ~ be still ~ and stay ~ and wait ..'

My goodness, do you use word in language that floats high on gentle thermals! Content entire,, desire.. compass points at a space - sad as sad but extra-ordinary! An absolute brilliance of writing... stopping at that cos will end up reading 'over the top'.

Posted 8 Months Ago


Hailey Juliet

8 Months Ago

Thank you for reading and for your enthusiastic review:)
Very Good :) !!! Like your writing !

Posted 8 Months Ago


Hailey Juliet

8 Months Ago

Thank you Teresa:)
Teresa

8 Months Ago

Np. :) !!!!!!!!
Tis quite a pleasure to see someone enter the gates of the cafe offering not only a garland of the imagination but also a bushel of intelligence that is often times absent from the pickings.

Posted 8 Months Ago


Hailey Juliet

8 Months Ago

Thank you very much, I appreciate the compliment!
Whoa! This is absolutely incredible. Your word choice is great, and the line breaks and spacing are awesome and used to great effect. The imagery is breathtaking and the metaphors are beautiful. Everything is so well written.

Posted 8 Months Ago


Hailey Juliet

8 Months Ago

Hannah, thanks for stopping by and taking the time to leave such a kind review:)
LOVE THIS! I had to google the title word, which is a delightful addition to my vocabulary. I love all things Alaska, but here you've presented a fresh new take I'd never thought much about before. I love the way you carry this thru with a double meaning: "merge coastlines in our memory" . . . "follow aurora in perpetuity" . . . and so many more well-crafted phrases. Your imagination is banging, my friend (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 8 Months Ago


Hailey Juliet

8 Months Ago

Thank you so much Margie, I'm happy to hear that you liked it:)
Ooooh, this is so perfect! What talent! Your timing, phrasing and word choices are to die for! I love it bringing me back to classic Romantic writers. Also, your writing reminded me of my time in college (northern Minnesota) and how cold and luminescent the frosty landscape was. I thought the merging coastlines was just brilliant. I love your moving metaphor of birds and landscapes to play the drama and love in this relationship. Your piece ebbed and flowed in all the right places.. You have a skillful mastery of written word, and I can't wait to see more!!

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Hailey Juliet

8 Months Ago

Thank you Alexa, I really appreciate the generous review and the thoughts you shared!
Wow, I am always taken aback by your work Hailey. This piece uses words in such an imaginative fashion and I can picture this unfolding in my mind. I loved this poem, particularly the stanza about merging coastlines which will be still. Beautiful, vivid imagery in this piece, keep up the good work!

Posted 8 Months Ago


Hailey Juliet

8 Months Ago

Thank you so much:)

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