Two

Two

A Chapter by Hailey Juliet
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. . .

something like the first breath
you take after our skin meets
something like those first time
shivers as you enter through 
that open window, unnoticed

something like your eyes
on those window panes 
that separate you from the 
rest of civilized society,
clean sheets and status-no

your quotidienne of sympathy
wrapped up in icy-blues
and blank stares, pupils
like poles, like proper
black holes, sucking 

sutures falling loose
tugging at my skin
while you satiate yourself
on life's wine and flesh meats
like at that polish deli on sixth

five cents a gram or
something like the first
time you felt my gaze
on the back of your neck
what a wreck i was

and still am, still watching
as you flippantly whip
yourself off the bed next
to me, already catching the 
next bus in your head

i'd say take me with you
but i'll spare you 
the convenience of 
sideways glances and style 
points; kudos or something

. . .

 



© 2018 Hailey Juliet



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Your narrator comes across as if she's filled with disdain for this apparent lover in the poem. Your words are like double-edged swords, slicing off a bite of seemingly lovey-dovey sentiment while also stabbing this poor sucker in the belly at the same time. The narrator is calling the guy "flippant" but to me, the narrator feels pretty flippant too. This reminds me of a sick scenario I was in for a couple years where passive aggression ruled, disguised as passion! I love it when a romantic scene is portrayed with many shades of contrasting feelings (as in your poem here), rather than the patsy smooth seduction scene (((HUGS))) fondly, Margie

Posted 7 Months Ago


sounds like the makings of a great book

Posted 8 Months Ago



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