At the Bottom of The Pool

I wish to dive

into a pool

and disappear

be

    low

          the surface

allowing the water

to close above me,

with the security

of the womb,

sound and light muted,

lullabied in a calming

liquid warmth.

I need to dive

into a pool

and disappear

be

    low

          the surface

                         where peace resides

Reviews

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

I really like what I felt in and from this. The water is that way, especially in a pool. When it closes over and you can hear your own heartbeat...breathless. There is a serene stillness..."liquid warmth" "the womb"...perhaps, as you point out so well, that is what it is - sitting on the bottom is like that, a return of sorts.
I also liked the dividing of below, to make it be low....very effective.
Great poem~

[SHEEMA HUQ]

i like the description of the urge to dive in...nice

[Distant horizons]

Even as a non swimmer, i can feel the beauty and solitude in this piece.

[New Dawn]

thanks Lorry - glad you could relate

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... i feel like i'm reading my own heart's song... loved the way your words flow... the image of "the womb" is amazing... and so is the overall presentation... these moments (when we wish to vanish)... are precious moments... if they don't make us hide in a shell, then they help us understand ourselves better... if they make us hide or silence us, then they could be self-destructive... just my thoughts after reading this beautiful piece, dearest shelley...

[New Dawn]

Thank you Serah , glad you liked it - would really like to dive to the bottom of a pool right now and stay there. Few real life issues going on. Thank you for your encouraging review as always

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... i'm sorry about your difficulties... i'm sorry about mine too... but what i find most remarkable is that we write... the only think that keeps me sane is writing... but that is the first step to life i feel... i hope the issues are resolved soon... and to your satisfaction... i don't know if mine will be resolved soon or to my satisfaction but what i do know is that i'll write and my sanity will never be at stake again... not in reality and not in anyone's perception...