My space
A Poem by
New Dawn
taking up space
I take up space,
not much, but enough
to hold the sum of my
molecules,
the volume of my mass,
and this space is
wholly mine
fitted to the image of
my body,
a 'me' shaped tunnel
through
which only I might
pass.
It expands and
contracts
with the whim of my
waistline.
My space.
But what happens when I
am gone
will this space belong
to another?
the contours moulded
to different
dimensions,
Or will there be a
void?
a 'me' shaped void
that people will step
around
unable to pass through
because they
just don't fit!
© 2012 New Dawn
Featured Review
. oh, this is a lovely piece of work ...
. only true poets can wonder aloud about space and existence uniquely ...
. after reading your words, i'm wondering too ...
. your question is profound, existential and spiritual ... IMHO ...
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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wonderfully perceptive and thought provoking. lets all hope we get to find out the answer.
Posted 11 Years Ago
wonderfully perceptive and thought provoking. lets all hope we get to find out the answer.
11 Years Ago
Thank you - just found mysel pondering one day about that little bit of space that we all take up - .. read more Thank you - just found mysel pondering one day about that little bit of space that we all take up - glad you liked it
Wow...now, I am in a mind tangle...I keep thinking I have easy answers and then, they don't work. Suffice to say you would certainly leave a void, dear poet, that no one could fill just right.
Posted 11 Years Ago
Wow...now, I am in a mind tangle...I keep thinking I have easy answers and then, they don't work. Suffice to say you would certainly leave a void, dear poet, that no one could fill just right.
11 Years Ago
Thank you so much - I would love to think that there is a little patch of space that will always be .. read more Thank you so much - I would love to think that there is a little patch of space that will always be mine
Lovely and clever write--and I agree with .me.--existential in its way. Greatly enjoyed reading this piece
Posted 11 Years Ago
Lovely and clever write--and I agree with .me.--existential in its way. Greatly enjoyed reading this piece
Clever write as in cyberspace so in life , unique cant be replaced.
Posted 11 Years Ago
Clever write as in cyberspace so in life , unique cant be replaced.
This was deep and profound!
Posted 11 Years Ago
This was deep and profound!
By the whims of our waistlines, indeed.lol I think we all just leave a void. We are all irreplaceable, after all.
Posted 11 Years Ago
By the whims of our waistlines, indeed.lol I think we all just leave a void. We are all irreplaceable, after all.
This is a very good piece of writing, based on an original, clever idea, then worked at very well with poetic skill, a surprising, excellent poem.
Posted 11 Years Ago
This is a very good piece of writing, based on an original, clever idea, then worked at very well with poetic skill, a surprising, excellent poem.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
. oh, this is a lovely piece of work ...
. only true poets can wonder aloud about space and existence uniquely ...
. after reading your words, i'm wondering too ...
. your question is profound, existential and spiritual ... IMHO ...
Posted 11 Years Ago
. oh, this is a lovely piece of work ...
. only true poets can wonder aloud about space and existence uniquely ...
. after reading your words, i'm wondering too ...
. your question is profound, existential and spiritual ... IMHO ...
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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I have always written to some extent. seem to be leaning toward poetry at moment. In my other existance I am a nurse , wife , mother of three. Just like to share and get back some constructive critici..
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