My space

My space

A Poem by New Dawn
"

taking up space

"

I take up space,

not much, but enough

to hold the sum of my molecules,

the volume of my mass,

and this space is wholly mine

fitted to the image of my body,

a 'me' shaped tunnel through

which only I might pass.

It expands and contracts

with the whim of my waistline.

My space.

But what happens when I am gone

will this space belong to another?

the contours moulded

to different dimensions,

Or will there be a void?

a 'me' shaped void

that people will step around

unable to pass through

because they

just don't fit!

© 2012 New Dawn


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. oh, this is a lovely piece of work ...

. only true poets can wonder aloud about space and existence uniquely ...

. after reading your words, i'm wondering too ...

. your question is profound, existential and spiritual ... IMHO ...

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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wonderfully perceptive and thought provoking. lets all hope we get to find out the answer.

Posted 11 Years Ago


New Dawn

11 Years Ago

Thank you - just found mysel pondering one day about that little bit of space that we all take up - .. read more
Wow...now, I am in a mind tangle...I keep thinking I have easy answers and then, they don't work. Suffice to say you would certainly leave a void, dear poet, that no one could fill just right.

Posted 11 Years Ago


New Dawn

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much - I would love to think that there is a little patch of space that will always be .. read more
Lovely and clever write--and I agree with .me.--existential in its way. Greatly enjoyed reading this piece

Posted 11 Years Ago


Clever write as in cyberspace so in life , unique cant be replaced.

Posted 11 Years Ago


This was deep and profound!

Posted 11 Years Ago


By the whims of our waistlines, indeed.lol I think we all just leave a void. We are all irreplaceable, after all.

Posted 11 Years Ago


This is a very good piece of writing, based on an original, clever idea, then worked at very well with poetic skill, a surprising, excellent poem.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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...
. oh, this is a lovely piece of work ...

. only true poets can wonder aloud about space and existence uniquely ...

. after reading your words, i'm wondering too ...

. your question is profound, existential and spiritual ... IMHO ...

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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