Fight back

many times v feel as if v cant confront any challenges, any difficulties... but v must rise above that r courageously fight back!

I was humming my tune

Somebody took it away

I was smiling

Somebody wiped it away

I was strolling around

Somebody stopped my way

I was strumming the strings of jollity

Somebody spoiled my play

With every step that I took

Abundance of sorrows it spray

I got caught in a cobweb

A heavy price I had to pay

Eventually I lost my spirit and my self

Life became arduous and grey

Yet my ardor for life 

It could not easily slay

I got myself together

Even when I saw everyone betray

There was a spark in me

I began to see the flowers sway

Tried to enjoy every moment

And kept all worries at bay

Even in the most tumultuous surges

I learnt to swim without dismay

So be strong and fight back

Be there forever and stay!

Author's Note

i wasn't very happy with this so please tell me how i should improve this

Reviews

[deeps]

I really enjoyed this I feel this way sometimes.
Wonderful rhyme scheme and flow.

[loverly9316]

it seems a bit broken but good use of words and it is a great poem all together

[Nayan]

Extremely strong stream of Hope! I can exactly relate to it, as many of my poems too start with lesser hope and dismay, but gradually become stronger and stronger in Hope, and finally triumphs with a positive!

You really have a great gift in you. Thanks :)

[Simple_mee]

I really liked the way the thoughts have been put. Good work...

[Dev]

hmm.. technically I cant offer much advice.. (frankly I fumble on that many times too)Just the first four line could use a little work with the flow. They seem a little too abrupt other than that acc/ to me a nice read !! Good job !! :)