Cycles

I miss you, Susan. I always cycle back to you...

I wax and wane like the motions of a milky moon,

careened in the light’s creamy and ardent ambitions

toward her cached memory, a shroud of peace kept with me,

 

a moment when we walked under the same chalky liquid drops,

like the white water offered from oceans, I cycle through sky,

returned to my memory by destined wind, I always float to her,

 

the day when we stood in the shallow pine white brook,

and seeing her eyes see mine, and the lightning storm

that night when we tried to fall asleep in separate stories.

Reviews

[Michael W. Farrelly]

'the day when we stood in the shallow pine white brook,
and seeing her eyes see mine, and the lightning storm
that night when we tried to fall asleep in separate stories.'
There is absolutely nothing that I can say about this without taking away from the sheer sublime beauty you captured. Pulled on the heart-strings here.

[Not Afraid of Bruises]

loved this - enough said :)

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Beautiful, stunning imagery and the last line is like nothing I have ever heard - Superb, Thank you.
Light,
Siddartha

[Kasey Klein]

Hi Travis.

Heartfelt

wax and wane
milky moon

[Vince]

cached memory....that my friend is genius. The brain is nothing more than an organic computer anyway. It's got processors and memory and hard drive capacity and the motherboard and all the electrical wirings. I loved the last line. I don't know if it was intentional, but "separate stories" can mean both stories as in levels of a building or plot lines. Perfectly ambiguous.

[KayOss]

I enjoyed this. It wasn't quite what I was expecting when I saw the title. It was cyclical without being overtly so, which is a nice surprise. You managed to convey the idea of cycles and of returning without resorting to repetition or worn-out cliches. It was a nice and welcome surprise. Your words are eloquent and your message as subtle and gentle as a new lover's caress, yet as clear as newsprint. While your language is elevated, it isn't overly so. This makes your poem pleasing to those who love high language and accessible to those who either don't understand it or who prefer simpler stuff. You strike a nice balance here, finding the happy medium that many poets long for. Great job with that. You've got a masterpiece on your hands here.

[Erin Phoenix]

Your writting is very nice. I enjoy your poetry. Whats next?

[No One Important]

WOW!!! I really liked this one. It was very well written and conveyed a eloquent message with subtle imagery and blatant subtext...masterful.

[Kelly Scheppers]

You are a force of poetic nature, Travis. This is magnificently penned!

My best,
Kelly

[J.P.O.et]

yes, I like this, you have become a better poet right before my eyes
'I wax and wane like the motions of a milky moon', so alliterative right there, just rolls off
I love how you compare your affinity for and love for this girl to cycles of the moon
that always cycles back to her
Excellent
J.P.O.et