My Face is Pale Satin

I figure that if I talk about how secretive I am, it will go away eventually. So far, it isn't working very well.

My face is pale satin, my eyes hollow rocks,
Hidden deep down inside, my smooth façade blocks,
Emotion, hidden away from my face.
But neither from sorrow, nor from disgrace.

You send me feelings, I give nothing back,
The emotion in  my body is hard to track.
But if you look deeper, look through my curtain,
You'll find something surprising, of that I'm certain.

For deep down inside, past rocks blocking the way,
Emotion lays weeping on an old silver tray.
Never used, never wanted, under lock and key,
Will you save my feelings?  Will you rescue me?

The real me is hidden, dragons hold it under,
Instead of hearing my birdsong, you hear only thunder.
But fend off the dragons, with sword and shield,
And my feelings will be rightfully mine to wield.

I thank you for your courage, and for your care,
Now my true feelings are mine to wear.
My face was pale satin, my eyes would never show,
The true feeling inside me, with its warm silver glow.

Author's Note

Give me suggestions, but I might not pay attention.

Reviews

[Chaos Stone]

only suggestion is that you can limit yourself by rhyming every line
it got more interesting towards the middle where the lines didnt sync
as for being secretive, youll find someone you wish to open up to eventually. but definitely dont push people away who are trying to get you to open up
i forgot to mention: congrats

[Angela ☄️]

I just have to say, some poems I read now days arn't really creative like this one here. Not many poems tug at my heart and make me feel warm on the inside. :) I love the words: "My face was pale satin, my eyes would never show,
The true feeling inside me, with its warm silver glow." I hope to read more poems like this very soon.....

[R E Tree]

I got more and more drawn each line I red. I felt so interested by the lines you have created. My favourite line is will you save my feelings? will you rescue me? and the answer is I definatly will

[VampireBunny]

Awesome job, it feels like yuoe hiding something, or feelings from someone or for someone, but evryone is right you should open up, it's not like every single person in the world is a jerk or out to get you. Some people want to get close to you, becuse they like the person that you are, and they want to get to know you better!

[Butterflymom]

I really enjoyed this piece, and it flows well, and the sentiment is well expressed. You are a true wordsmith....
" The real me is hidden, dragons hold it under,
Instead of hearing my birdsong, you hear only thunder.
But fend off the dragons, with sword and shield,
And my feelings will be rightfully mine to wield."

[Vesa Lee]

Very, very good. You've expressed yourself perfectly.
I'm voting for you! *smile*

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

Wow i love it..it flows wonderfully
Great Job

[Penny Dreadful]

wow it feels like you have read my feelings.

love it

xxxx

[jumbie's #1 fan]

this is really good. you sound very secretive...haha great job