Just Thoughts

Just Thoughts

A Poem by Hollywood
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Not the usual love poem, it's about family & hardships. I've decided to keep it the way I first wrote it.

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I've just heard the news

The word was barely spreading but I called

Called because some-how I was worried

The four of us split up two years ago

& now, it's more surreal than I expected

 

I believe the crazy & the not-too-crazy had a balance

We all conter acted each other

We were a family

Disfunctinoal but now more so

 

You're court date is next wednesday

Mom has called the cops

Dad is loosing it slowly

 

We've both felt the cold on our feet

The first day we weren't premitted shoes

We've both felt the hot on our feet

As we walked through hell together

 

You've been beside me

I've been beside you

But the blood doesn't run through our veins together

You've betrayed me

Lied to me

Tried to fight me

Tried to destroy me in small ways

 

I'm writing this to say

I love you

I love you even without the blood running through both our veins

I believe the crazy & the not-too-crazy had a balance

But not today

We were a family


© 2010 Hollywood



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Hollywood
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It seems to me like you've been through quite the ride with your family; both the good times and the bad. As usual, your poetry seems to call directly out with perfect clarity, and allows the reader to relate.

My family has had its fair share of arguments and out-castings and yet, at the same time, blood is thicker than water.

Unfortunately, it can sometimes be hard to imagine the bridges ever being fixed, which is the situation I watch my mother and one of my sisters in.

Honest, and fair work, that shows how a unit so close can be pulled apart by that very closeness.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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wow, this made me feel...well sad...
and reminded me of my own family =[
I could only imagine the rain falling outside in New York...with people walking by and cars splashing water onto the sidewalk
and it's like..I saw myself angry...looking at my own sister and...just wow
I felt hurt reading this...like I'd just gone through something with someone I loved
if these are "just thoughts," then I love your brain...and I will have to try not to eat it =S
I liked it

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Joe
Wow!!! The struglles of the family seem to be tearing this family apart. But luckily you're love could someday bring it all back together. Well done!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

It seems to me like you've been through quite the ride with your family; both the good times and the bad. As usual, your poetry seems to call directly out with perfect clarity, and allows the reader to relate.

My family has had its fair share of arguments and out-castings and yet, at the same time, blood is thicker than water.

Unfortunately, it can sometimes be hard to imagine the bridges ever being fixed, which is the situation I watch my mother and one of my sisters in.

Honest, and fair work, that shows how a unit so close can be pulled apart by that very closeness.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Your writing says a lot. I would rate it 5 stars :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i must say that i really like it, and in someway i felt that..u know complicated family issues :S
but i felt that so much and i agree with u
i love them all and i cant hate them....its a basic instinct!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

For this simply being thoughts this is astonishing. It flows so well. Remarkable work. Keep it up =)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Haha you were so right! It does remind me of my story,but it has more of that mystical allure because you don't know who it's directed at. But you can feel all the love and emotion in it,and you can also hear the history behind it. I LOVED it(:

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dear poetess, I get the feeling you have tons to share with the world, and I think you have the talent to do so in a very special way. Don't lose that, its a gift. And don't overthink it okay, just do it. Who knows how much creative achievment has gone unknown, for the simple lack of a little courage. Loved the poem. Just thoughts? It was more than that. It was, Just real, and, Just brilliant.

Antonio


Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on January 27, 2010
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