Eyes of a Sinner

The rain can hide the tears falling from these sinner's eyes...

Rain, rain please come again
Flow over this face of a sinner...

Why I have to wait so long
with your drops on my face
 where they belong?

My heart is aching
My knees are weak
but your drip is my decent veil.


They got my home
my family, my friends
and just leave me all alone.

I have nothing left
but a naked body
and dirty feet.

Who shall remain noble
after robbing all I have,
even a bit of my weary soul?

Yes, I am a sinner
in their artificial fairness
where they are just the winners.

Forgive me, forget me
for I am just an outlaw
A noble man,  I couldn't be.

These eyes of me
still wait for your touch
come on over me.

Please hide my pain
come flow and blend with tears
from these eyes of a sinner.


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Author's Note

Reviews

[Souladareatease]

What a deep and thoughtful poem, I Love this!!!
Very Heart-wrenching.
people KNOW right from wrong morally, without much teaching to it...
tread light upon the earth and treat others with kindness and respect...this should not have to be taught, to cast the judgement eye is to be blind of ones self...everyone falls someway somehow, helping these ones up when they do is the better course...not many are worth judgement...except Murder in cold blood/ rape
most other crimes...or so called ones have to do with loss of "something" in some life or self...such as stealing...a crime it is...yet they may need it to survive in the only way they know how...right from wrong...we know it essentially within our souls.
A wonderful work You have here!!! pen on!!!

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

So much constructive. I am grateful of your kind words.

[Collins]

Well written. I love it

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks, Collins.

[Rhianne Ney]

This is so overwhelming (:
I was taken aback by the way you wrote it (:
I think it gradually embraced what the video here is trying to express making it easier to understand

Anyways, I was wondering how to put a video, like how you did here?

[Mauricio Montoya]

change comes from within, those who look without are blinded by the light they seek. The answer lies in your heart.
Nice work.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

The answer lies in my heart. I'll try to determine that...
Thank you for the read and review.

[Mauricio Montoya]

You live by whatever decision you make, follow you heart, you know what right from wrong.

[An Ordinary Woman]

Very pretty and heartfelt. As for me I find something to love in just about everyone. Sinners included because everyone of is are sinners. Indeed we are.

Lovely writing, dear.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks for the compliment.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Beautiful piece, great write. Love the sinner emotional landscape painted in this poem. Keep writing.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks, kabayan!

[Michael Fernandez]

Beautiful. Just...beautiful, a powerful piece constructing an array of emotions within the reader, nicely done.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks.

[Muse]

what do I think?

For whoever is without sin let them cast the first stone..that's what I think.

There's a lot of heart behind this writing....it is so touching...a dark lonely place that we all have been in during some point in time. And I agree with one of the comments below..it is engrained into our conscienceness I think...to know right from wrong.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

My beautiful Muse, thanks for sparing your time reading my work. I agree in what you think. We are the same in that aspect. I am just so glad that we, as readers can read also the heart of the writer in every work he does. That's what you did now, and I thank you for that. I always learn from all of you. Thanks again.

[Muse]

my mind is fighting a complex war...so I appreciate writer's like youself and Stacey Watts that can write clearly...simply...without all the crazy metaphors...it keeps me grounded.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thank you for that. I will try to read the works of Stacey Watts soon.

[Muse]

you will like her...she's so unique, talented.... loving and kind.

[Carolann Dowsett]

I think that only God can Judge and if we judge others then we too will be Judged harshly by God. A lovely, heartfelt, deep poem. A wonderful write.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks, my dear Carol. You always have the kind words to say. Thank you for sparing your time.

[Carolann Dowsett]

You are very welcome.

[Michael Kevin Spencer]

I like the tone of this, especially the lines:

I have nothing left
but a naked body
and dirty feet.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Oh, thanks for the compliment Michael. Sometimes a person with a guilty heart feels that nothing was left on him when people condemn and left.

[Singing Bird]

Hi Gorgeous, thank you for reviewing my work and your positive comments connected to thus.

Your work is deep, meaningful and( my partner says "Cool".)
I wanted to read it again and again, for you write from your soul, poignantly so.

And you're oh so right, judgement is nigh from ignorance and all those un-contained seem punishable.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thank you, dear Singing Bird. And thanks to your partner saying that my work is cool. Keep reading and writing.