UNTIL THE SUNSET

You came
Like the wind that gently embraced me
And made me sway and dance for a moment
Then suddenly frittered me away
And left me alone with a graze.

You were the wind
When once I dreamed of love
To be forever
But showed yourself as a gale
Which toughly brushed my skin
And left me with a sore.



And I...

I am still the fragile flower in the field
Waiting for the gale to roll in
Like before
Even for a moment
To brush my skin
And leave me even deeper wounds.

I don't care.

I don't care how many wounds
And how many scars will be left on me.
Just come again.
Embrace me.
Feel me.
Sway with me
Until my weakness  entrench my roots
And make me bite the dust.



I will wait...
For the wind
That once my coarse blanket.

I will wait...
From the first light


Until the sunset.

Author's Note

Reviews

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Amazing, Dhaye! You started with a smooth flow of thought and rhythm and this stanza

"I don't care.
Just come again.
Embrace me.
Feel me.
Sway with me
Until my weakness entrench my roots
And make me bite the dust."

speaks or urgency and desperation. Then you dramatically shifted to enthralling smooth lines and you ended the poem exceptionally. I'm proud of you, my fellow Filipino. ;) Keep up the good work. :x

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thank you so much, Blue. Actually this is one of my fave free verse poems...and it is very memorable to me. Glad you like this.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

I assume you poured out your soul into this one. :) Great music, too. :x

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Actually, my soul's in this book. Almost all of my works here tells the same story once upon a time. And the the music was painstakingly chosen for the content.
Thank you again.

[Cassie]

Wow!!!! dhaye this one is so good, I enjoyed it but sometimes you dont have to wait, just move and let the wind bring along another love, before you know it the scars will be gone

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks, Cassie.

[FlatLineBeauty]

This was amazing and in a simple way, and when i say simple I mean to compare like a simple pleasure... Like a sunset.... Simple yet beautiful. xo Winter

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks for dropping by on my page, Winter. That's one of my favorites from my old pieces. Yesterday was my first year anniversary here in WC so I am reminiscing my old works which are memorable for me.

[Lydia Shutter]

The romantic longing is bittersweet in this powerfully emotional write, Dh. The wind is a constant throughout your write and you used it very effectively. Splendid imagery. The presentation is so pretty too. I enjoyed this one, my friend. Lydi**

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thank you, Lydi.

[Pryde Foltz]

A very, very romantic and touching piece, Dhaye.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks, PF.

[annabellee]

This is just lovely. An excellent read and write. I also liked the pictures :)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thank you, Anna.

[annabellee]

you're most welcome :)

[Scott Metro]

A very beautiful write...come bruise me but come...I like the theme here and your word choices are excellent. This is a gem...KUDOS !!


Admiration.
Scott

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks, Scott.

[Scott Metro]

:)
S......

[NeiL ArandA]

I'm reading this again Dhaye . I saw something that need tweaking . I didnt see it the first time

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Wow! That's great, Neil This is one of my favorites so I really want this to be polished. Game!

[NeiL ArandA]

This piece was created and submitted on July 15 2013 ...

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Hehe. What's up with the date of posting? I'm just reviewing my old time favorites because it's my anniversary here now as a writer. This one is so memorable...

[Frieda P]

This is simply gorgeous Dhaye...imagery is spot on, and the sentiment bittersweet albeit luverly! Kudos.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks, Frieda.

[NeiL ArandA]

Wow This is so wonderful Dhaye...

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks, Neil.