I SHOWED MY FACE (Free Verse)

I saw a world of faceless people

      where heart is not a part of the body

      and mind is the dominating piece

      while mouth is a subordinating component.

     

I saw them, I heard them

      so I showed myself unto them

      and I sang my song

      and painted their stories.

 

But I made a mistake

      when I showed myself unto them-

      they chased me

      and laughed out of my court.

 

And I made another mistake

       when I sang my song-

       they shouted at me to stop

       so I forgot my lines.

 

Then I made one more mistake

        when I painted their stories-

        they grabbed my canvass

        and  threw it piece by piece....

 

Like my heart

       broken into pieces

       they tried to crush it

       just because...

 

       I showed my face.

Author's Note

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

we make ourselves vulnerable when we express our inner feelings...and often our heart gets crushed---

those faceless, heartless people who never show themselves.

reminds me of high school dances when the guys would laugh at me because i got out on the floor and danced...always the first one...they laughed but it was because they couldn't dance themselves...so it made them feel better about themselves to make fun of me...it's like that with people.

but i have always believed in showing the real me regardless of consequence.

really like this poem...last line in fifth stanza might be "and threw it piece by piece"---

jacob

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks, Jacob.

[Addy]

Nice writing. Its really soulful and you can feel the emotion behind it. Thank you for sharing

[Frieda P]

We take a chance when we reveal our true selves to people, very often this is why people hide behind a facade, it tends to be safer there, although a lonely place to dwell. Great read Dhaye!

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thank you, Fri. I was just editing some of my pieces and moving them into another book when I saw this one.

[Frieda P]

The pleasure was mine, I relate to this one profoundly.

[Sunflower/Sara Kendrick]

Great expressive and emotive work that you have penned in this one..Enjoyed reading it this morning..I am glad that I chose it to read..Sara

[nibhz]

your poem clearly shows what's the reality of the world and its people is! anyone in this world just can't afford to be transparent! good work! keep it up! (y)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks, nibhz.

[NeiL ArandA]

Very deep Dhaye . There is always a great price to pay when we let our guard down and become transparent .

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks, Neil.

[Pax]

when I read this, I see a different perspective, as if you are a reporter, writing an article, in doing so, there will always be someone who will not like it...

on the other side, the world is indeed full of faceless people, i saw it too many times that i am used to it, that i myself do the same sometimes, well aren't we all have a facade that covers us... its a harsh world out there, we know that to well, aren't we... but despite everything else, we risk something for what we love - and that show's we show who we are...

very nice, i like it!

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

It's true, Pax. Because each "face" we show has its meaning depending on the "eyes" that looks at it.

"Aren't we all have a facade that covers us?" ---Maybe yes, maybe no. The choice still depends on the "ears" that hear. Anyway, "in every rule there is an exemption".

Haha! I love quotes and idioms nowadays.

Thanks for peeking in, Pax.

[Pax]

I think everyone has it, it's either we show it or not, but definitely everyone has one, coz i believed there is always duality in every perspective... :)

you're most welcome pretty friend...

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Duality...I think it's a nice title for another piece, Pax. Hehe.
BTW, I like your new avatar. :)

[Pax]

i think I have a poem about that, it talks about duality in life and life's equilibrium, I am not sure you have read it... it is a nice title indeed, thanks, its my cat before... taken frommy catography profile in DA...

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Ah, so you have already used that title? Okay, I won't make another one. Hehe. I can't remember if I've read it. I joined here at WC last January 4...Is it older than that?

[writing mojo]

I like the way you display what is gained at face value..
no one can take that way..excellent piece

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Sometimes people see your face while not seeing theirs...

Thanks for peeking in.

[Sami Khalil]

You are so right. You can show your truth to the world but if the world does not like truth they will mock us , make fun of us , treat us with disdain. If we show vulnerability it is like inviting wolves who are heartless...Bravo

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Indeed. In this theater of life, discrimination is always an issue. Thank you for a meaningful visit today, Sami.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[SHEEMA HUQ]

So sad, I think that this piece work especially well, read out loud and your chosen form is great, excellent work.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks, Sheema. I really appreciate your visit.