Poem 62. JUST TAKE ME (THERE)

All I know is to love...

Take me now, I am yours forever
I'll be your light, your perfect saver
Don't be afraid, I will hold you, dear
Take me, hold me if you really care.

Take me now, my whole life can be yours
I will go with you, that's my real course
Use me, feel me, I don't need a choice
Your fall, my fall, we shan't make it worse.

Take me now, I am yours forever
Just hold me tight, with strength and power
I don't want to live without you here
Wherever you are, just take me there.

I'll be the wind beneath you, my dear
Against all odds, I'll be there, I swear
Take me now, I am yours forever
Wherever you are, just take me there...

Author's Note

Reviews

[gabrielle]

dhaye, this reminded me of the kind of wife mentioned in the bible, that is, a submissive wife. in here you pictured a woman who is willing to let go of her pride, a woman who is willing to be on the sidelight so that her husband could be in the limelight, a woman who could let go everything in the name of love. Quite admirable character and i was asking myself, can i become a woman of this selfless character the moment that i am going to give away my sacred vow?
what i am not really agreeable is on this line: "Your fall, my fall, shan't we make it worse" -when the other fall or in his time of weakness perhaps it's the wife time to show her inner strength. Beautiful write.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks, gab. Perhaps the punctuation mark affects the line. What I want to tell is "if there's a problem we should not make it worse, we should stop your falling, as your fall is also my fall." I'll make it "we shan't make it worse", what do you think?

[gabrielle]

lol..halata shortcomings ko sa language. i wasn't able to grasp the idea kanina. naiisip ko lang bakit naman pareho sila magfall..me reservation ako magsuggest ng grammar kc mahina ako jan, dhaye.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Ginawa ko na. Hehe. May maiisip pa naman siguro akong mas okay...edit ko na lang ulit. Yan kalimitan problem ko sa poems with rhyme scheme and meter...need e-consider yung mga yun. Thanks for reminding me again, gab.

[DIVYA]

A poem of love written with total abandon. When we truly love someone, we trust them enough to leave our life in their hands and let them take us to the heights of passion.

I loved the rhymings and the feeling of utter committment and faith that this poem stirred within me. Superbly written Dhaye! Your pen truly speaks here!

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks a lot, Divya. :)

[DIVYA]

You are welcome Dhaye! Looking forward to more such awesome reads!

[Jeff]

Very emotional piece. Wonderful job expressing it!

[Tom]

An unconditional proposal !

An emotive and sincere poem, well executed !

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thank you, Tom.

[Jack...]

Beautiful my friend. A very nice read on this cool Tuesday morning.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks, Jack. Glad you like this poem of mine...