Poem 6.  GIRL IN THE RAIN

Poem 6. GIRL IN THE RAIN

A Chapter by Dhaye
"

Who is she?

"


I saw someone standing in the rain
Then I shouted to him, "Hey!
Why are you standing out there?
Don't you feel cold in the mizzle?

He just looked at me and smiled
So I ran fast at his side
I offered my coat and opened it wide
But oh, he still refused to hide.

I looked at him in confusion
He don't even have a motion
But he smiled again in distinction
Of his great joy and satisfaction.

I can't contain so I asked, "Why?
Why in the rain you never shun?
I thought the rain is heaven's cry
Her sympathy when someone's down?"

"My dear, my dear, the rain is nice
Just try to feel it, see the prize
It heals and fixes broken hearts
It nourishes the empty minds."

And so I moved to drop my coat
There in the rain, I stopped, I stood
I felt the drops, Oh, 'twas so good
It made me free, it mends, it soothes.

But when I looked at him again
Nobody's there with me in the rain
He left without a word to say
I'm the only one standing there.

Oh, if somebody would see me here
I want to show, I want to tell
The same story, the same old tale
Someone who'll save me as Girl In The Rain.



 









© 2013 Dhaye



Author's Note

Dhaye
Just an addition to my collection. I made a little twist about the tale...

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You really got that fascination of the rain, dhaye. ^__^ in this piece, you perfectly presented different perspectives. the girl who think she needs to save someone from the rain and the mysterious man who showed her that there's beauty under the rain.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dhaye

3 Years Ago

LOL. There's a twist in there. Actually, a person said to me that rain is good...so I believed in it.. read more
gabrielle

3 Years Ago

me mystery pa pala ang poem na ito. i was thinking that someone would likewise offer her an umbrella.. read more
Dhaye

3 Years Ago

Uy, another idea..."Dancing in the Rain"..nice title. Addict na yata ako sa rain ngayon, Gab. Dati p.. read more



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Not only wonder who the girl is but also who is the man? Maybe a guardian angel. I like your poem and like you I also like rain.
Something calming about it - as is your poem.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dhaye

3 Years Ago

Thank you .
Chloe..Across the Universe

3 Years Ago

you are welcome the poem is beautiful
i believe we all have multiple personalities and we all are multiple persons too.
a poet has a way to make them come alive and make sense among them.
once again, you took me.
thanks.

ps. second verse first sentence, last word should be in past tense(?) smiled?

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dhaye

3 Years Ago

Ah, yes. Thank you for the correction...and for dropping by.
Oh, this was ghostly and wonderful along with its imagery. I'm touched by the rain too for it is soooo romantic...Bravo

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dhaye

3 Years Ago

Thanks, Sami.
Sami Khalil

3 Years Ago

You are welcome...:).........
A ghostly apparition led this person to the joyous freedom the replenishing rain brings as it falls on top and all around !

A creative, happy poem !

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dhaye

3 Years Ago

Thank you for dropping by, Tom.
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Pax
I agree with Gab, you must love the rain so much that it became your muse everytime you write...

There is beauty in the rain...
There is pain in the rain...
There is nourishes after the rain...
everything has its reason, the rain is just another reason
a saviour or a poison...

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dhaye

3 Years Ago

"a saviour or a poison."..I don't think so. Before, rain only gives me the feeling of depression and.. read more
Pax

3 Years Ago

it's just a hypothetical circumstances I see, its still needs to be proven but either way its a posi.. read more
You really got that fascination of the rain, dhaye. ^__^ in this piece, you perfectly presented different perspectives. the girl who think she needs to save someone from the rain and the mysterious man who showed her that there's beauty under the rain.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dhaye

3 Years Ago

LOL. There's a twist in there. Actually, a person said to me that rain is good...so I believed in it.. read more
gabrielle

3 Years Ago

me mystery pa pala ang poem na ito. i was thinking that someone would likewise offer her an umbrella.. read more
Dhaye

3 Years Ago

Uy, another idea..."Dancing in the Rain"..nice title. Addict na yata ako sa rain ngayon, Gab. Dati p.. read more

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Dhaye
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