THE KITE (Rhyme)

Inspired by "Ang Guryon"

Holding the tie with my hand

I ran free and wild

I was the guide.

 

But strong wind came

I lost my grip, what a shame!

It flew away, higher like a plane.

 

I was left alone, worried and sad

How can it take longer, I’m bad

Without the guide, how long can it stand?

 

Will it come back to my hands tomorrow?

If not, I pray it will be held by someone in sorrow

So that he will hold it better than what I did times ago.

 

Author's Note

Rhyme. A rhyming poem has the repetition of the same or similar sounds of two or more words, often at the end of the line.

Reviews

[gabrielle]

It occurred to me that the kite could be a metaphor of us. i mean, who would not want to soar up high away from the hands that control us? But without the hands that keep us grounded, there's no assurance that we would land on a safe ground. rhythm is good dhaye!

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks, Gab. You are very supportive, my friend. Love you, girl!

[Tom]

When you know someone special cherish this friendship as it maybe difficult to regain if you let it go!!

An easy flowing poem with a purposeful message within!!

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

That's what I really feel. I don't want someone I treated as friend to go away...but I don't even have the right to control anybody's mind. Everyone is a free individual. I rely on God's will.

Wow! I owe you a lot, Tom. You're so generous...in giving your time and effort. I'm grateful.

[Tom]

My pleasure Dhaye, your are a creative writer !

[Neon]

Ha! Nice rhythm .. I enjoyed the poem.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks, Neon.

[Sami Khalil]

I loved kites growing up. They can be a good analogy for so many things...A wonderful poem...:)...................

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thank you.
I noticed you used your former avatar. Truly that our first choice is still the best. We keep on trying to show ourselves in different angles but we still go back to the one which will make us comfortable. I think this one is your favorite.

[Sami Khalil]

You are so right...Welcome...:)...............