Poem 22. SET ME FREE

Inspired by the song "Set Me Free" by Casting Crowns

I've been crying for so long
With this aching and somber song
Oh, why did you come along
Just to prove me I am wrong?

I've been trying to heal my scars
Those bruises I've gotten through the wars
The things I want, they're like the stars
The people I like, they're just too harsh.

I've been waiting for the time
That my tune would fit your rhyme 
I've been thinking if a mime
Could be enough to show what's mine?

Set me free from these aching chain
You are the light, don't trap me in vain
Take away my tears and pain
Once again, heal me with your rain...

Author's Note

Photo credits: Google images

Reviews

[Aethereal]

I enjoyed this poem so much that I decided to make a song of it. It inspired me to wrote this gift song-poem for you to keep as your own. Some of your original lines are in it. It has seven syllable 1/0/1/0/1/0/1 meter where “1” is accented and “0” is not accented. Sing along with the bouncing ball:

Melancholy Song

I’ve been singing all yearlong
this cold melancholy song.
You should not have come on strong
knowing that we don’t belong.

As I try to heal my scars,
all those heavyhearted mars,
I’m still looking towards the stars
over rubble and burnt chars.

I’ve been waiting all this time
for a tune to fit your rhyme.
I’ve been looking for that chime
that would truly make you mine.

Please release me from this chain;
shine your light through clouds and rain:
wipe my tears so I remain
once again in your domain.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks for the constant visit, Ae. I appreciate your feedback as always. Nice version. =)

[Aethereal]

It would be great if all of your poems could be set to music so you could make a album, but you'd first need to find a pretty singer, and a handsome guitar player. Perhaps a chorus of cute chipmunks in the background.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Your pieces are better songs, I supposed...so you can make a better album. LOL.
Glad you enjoy your visit on my page, Ae.

[Aethereal]

Once I organize a chorus of singing chipmunks, I should be on my way since all of my poems are song-poems. They must be pretty chipmunks.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

............. =)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Ahhh really mince work, I really love that last line because you know I love rain and find it spiritually healing.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

I agree, the rain can heal a wounded soul.
Thanks so much, cowboy.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

You are most welcome sweetie.

[Antoñyo]

Beautiful, sincere and courageous!
Wonderful work....songs are such a good source of inspiration

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thank you. Thank you. And more thank you's... :)

[Omegax45]

This poem is so nostalgic. I love it, and the song you chose for it. Can you tell me how you set up the music with the story?

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks.

Okay. Just go to You Tube, choose the apt music. Click share on the right side...embed on the left side then highlight the code...copy then paste on author's note or under your poem (when you edit or post). Hope that can help you.

[Omegax45]

Thank you very much.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

You're welcome.

[Saddam]

A truelly loveable poem and so well created that it touch my heart so. beautiful.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks, Ssadd.

[Giggling Star]

Such pain in this one Dhaye. I feel for you.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thank you so much, Star.

[DIVYA]

This poem has the most perfect and gorgeous rhyming scheme I have ever come across. I really loved this write...

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thank you so much, Divya.

[Praveeta]

A heartfelt piece. Nicely penned.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks, Praveeta. =)

[Praveeta]

You are welcome.

[NeiL ArandA]

I'm here ...you want praise of. critique . I'll come back to dissect it .

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Ano na naman yan? Pasabog na naman. Lahatin mo sa isang comment ha? Para isang edit lang...huwag gaya doon sa ginawa mo sa OH YOUTH ha?

[Rita L. Sev]

This is a song in itself, Dhaye. A strong piece, deeply emotive.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks, Rita. =)