Poem 22. SET ME FREE

Inspired by the song "Set Me Free" by Casting Crowns

I've been crying for so long
With this aching and somber song
Oh, why did you come along
Just to prove me I am wrong?

I've been trying to heal my scars
Those bruises I've gotten through the wars
The things I want, they're like the stars
The people I like, they're just too harsh.

I've been waiting for the time
That my tune would fit your rhyme 
I've been thinking if a mime
Could be enough to show what's mine?

Set me free from these aching chain
You are the light, don't trap me in vain
Take away my tears and pain
Once again, heal me with your rain...

Author's Note

Photo credits: Google images

Reviews

[Aethereal]

I enjoyed this poem so much that I decided to make a song of it. It inspired me to wrote this gift song-poem for you to keep as your own. Some of your original lines are in it. It has seven syllable 1/0/1/0/1/0/1 meter where “1” is accented and “0” is not accented. Sing along with the bouncing ball:

Melancholy Song

I’ve been singing all yearlong
this cold melancholy song.
You should not have come on strong
knowing that we don’t belong.

As I try to heal my scars,
all those heavyhearted mars,
I’m still looking towards the stars
over rubble and burnt chars.

I’ve been waiting all this time
for a tune to fit your rhyme.
I’ve been looking for that chime
that would truly make you mine.

Please release me from this chain;
shine your light through clouds and rain:
wipe my tears so I remain
once again in your domain.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks for the constant visit, Ae. I appreciate your feedback as always. Nice version. =)

[Aethereal]

It would be great if all of your poems could be set to music so you could make a album, but you'd first need to find a pretty singer, and a handsome guitar player. Perhaps a chorus of cute chipmunks in the background.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Your pieces are better songs, I supposed...so you can make a better album. LOL.
Glad you enjoy your visit on my page, Ae.

[Aethereal]

Once I organize a chorus of singing chipmunks, I should be on my way since all of my poems are song-poems. They must be pretty chipmunks.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

............. =)

[Laura Harrison]

This piece is perfect from start to finish, great job! :)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks a lot. =)

[wrote.here]

*cries and claps*
awesome write

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks, wh. =)

[gabrielle]

Freedom such a big word. We seek freedom from those who chained us but what if we were the ones who caused ourselves to be chained? I love the song =)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thank you, Gab. =)

[Raymond Federle]

beautiful and sad. Well done! :)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thank you, Ray. =)

[Carolann Dowsett]

Just when you think your scars are healing someone comes along and rips them apart again. Beautifully written and deeply heartfelt. Love this

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks, Carol. =)

[Leigh]

There are strong rhymes in this that make this bounce along like a song, just needs some chords now :-)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thank you, Leigh. =)

[Scott Metro]

A bit of self imposed torture here...but "Yes" I can relate to this easy.
Very nice write Sister...sorry about your torment..
Chin up !
Scott

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thank you, big bro. =)

[Scott Metro]

:)
Scott......

[Frieda P]

Somber yet hopeful write....

I've been waiting for the time
That my tune would fit your rhyme

Wish I had pen'd that line, it's exquisite, love the music too Dhaye, excellent!

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thank you so much, Frieda. =)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thank you, Frieda. =)

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the poem. I like the desire to be set free from memory.
"Set me free from these aching chain
You are the light, don't trap me in vain
Take away my tears and pain
Once again, heal me with your rain..."
Would be nice if a warm rain could erase our pain. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thank you so much, CP. (Late response. lol)

[Eddie Davis]

Casting Crowns is my wife's favorite group. I loved the line 'I've been waiting for the time
That my tune would fit your rhyme'. I think a lot of us do that, and some of us never think to change the tune, rather we expect Him to change the rhyme. Beautiful poem.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Wow! Glad to know about your wife's favorite group. Casting Crown became my fave group also because of their song "Who Am I". Thank you for the checking out this one, Eddie. Your too kind. =)

[Eddie Davis]

They are a wonderful group that does a lot of charity work as well. We got to see them in concert last year.