SAVE ME

a poem I made for a contest in the other site

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Too many roads I have to cross

And too much pain I have to bear

Too many seas I have to sail

Now there’s one mask I have to wear.

 

Sing me a song that lifts me up

Paint a picture that speaks up, too

Tell me the word that’s not too sharp

I only want the  best from you.

 

Give me a flow’r with gentle scent

Save the petals to gain my strength…

Author's Note

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

A song that is sung when the darkness begins to overtake the light. We need our friends to sing a lilting melody at times like that....a song that will make us believe tomorrow will be a brighter day. Such a song and the companionship of a friend can make a person feel strong and happy again. What an inspirational and uplifting write this is, Dh. On what other site do you post poetry? Lydi**

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

I have Writers-network, Poetry.com, Poetfreak, Wikinut, but this piece was a contest piece at starlitepoetry. I saw your name there, actually. LOL

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks for reading, Lydi. =)

[W R Stowe]

Very sweet and some what romantic with the Savior.How do you add music to the poems?

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thank you, W. If you want to add music to any piece, you should open a tab for You Tube, open the music you want to attach, click SHARE, then EMBED, highlight the embed CODE then COPY, go to your poem being written or edited, PASTE the code on the author's note. You can also put it after the poem like you are putting photos.
Hope that helps. Good luck!

[W R Stowe]

Ok thank you so much

[Frieda P]

A sweet song Dhaye, very uplifting read, I'll be back when I need a booster shot. ;-)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks, Fri. Glad you dropped by. =)

[Deuces]

We all need a lifeline at some point in life, when dread/despair seems to creep in and slowly take over. I enjoyed this, as I believe all can relate. Beautifully written.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thank you for dropping by.

[Bright Ocean Star]

Very soft, fragile, yet wary. Nice meter, good rhythm. very good.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thank you, Anne.

[Linda alexander]

Sing me a song that lifts me up
Great write, message is so clear and well projected, poet's request all to be tender and caring , enjoyed

[Eddie Davis]

A nice, hopeful poem that asks for the best and reflects your skill at crafting poetry. Well done.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks so much, Eddie. =)

[Aaron Flood]

Very pretty and bright...so nice among all the doom and gloom.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Why doom...thank you for dropping by, Aaron!

[Aaron Flood]

Just had read so many poems of negative descent...this was a nice change.

[gabrielle]

you penned this in ten minutes?! you did an amazing job here, dhaye. the last stanza is very meaningful.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Less pa nga eh..yabang..hehe. Kasi look naman...familiar lines na yan from different poems ko (Crossroad, etc)...Binuo ko just to easily comply with the rules in the contest. Yung contest administrator kasi nyan, nag-check sa aking isang poem na ginamitan ko dati ng "too much" na sabi nya dapat "too many"...oh, nagka-idea pa sya sa akin to make a contest...nagka-idea rin ako how to join the contest. =)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks pala, naning. =)

[gabrielle]

welcome dhaye...anadami mo talaga nagagawa..

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Quantity...not quality? LOL. Buti sa iyo with quality talaga. Pa-sweet at pa-cute lang naman poems ko. Hehe.

[gabrielle]

I think that this kind of writing is your forte dhaye. You can write it easily without sacrificing the quality. i am struggling to write some sweet romantic love poem but it usually end up tragic. lol

[paul sal.....]

Love is like a rolling sea...............embracing the sands so close to thee....................walk by my side and let the world be................take my hand and come swim with me.............

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Wow! I like that little gem. Thank you for reading my piece. =)

[paul sal.....]

The world is full of shining crystals if only our blind eyes could see...................Thank you for your brilliant poem and for visiting me..........