TWO IN FIVE (Tanka)

Tankas

 

DREAM BOY

 

I will meet you there

Claim your love as truly mine

Dream to be that girl

Someone who could really care

As I sleep with smile tonight

 

 *****

 

THE SIGN

 

In sickness and health

I will go with you, my love

Wear this band, take it

And be proud that I am yours

As I humbly give my life…

Author's Note

Tanka is a Japanese poem of five lines, the first and third composed of five syllables and the other seven (5-7-5-7-7).

* TWO IN FIVE means 2 poems in 5 lines or simply 2 Tankas

Reviews

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

Really lovely words. Could almost be used as wedding vows. Great. Well done.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thank you, ME. =)

[Tom]

A truly sincere and emphatic declaration, conveyed through heartfelt, creative poetic lines !

Splendid indeed !

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

And thanks for that sincere compliment, Tom. Hoping to read new writings from you soon. =)

[Coyote Poetry]

Beautiful and hopeful words. The Tanka was strong and the description was amazing. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thank you, CP.

[Eddie Davis]

So a Tanka is sort of like a Senyru's big brother ;) ? I might have to try my hand at these, but I love yours very well. The second one seemed like it could be used in a wedding ritual. Very lovely and well crafted.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Yes, actually, these Japanese poems are one of my addictions during my first 3 months here. My Haikus, Senryus and Tankas were already hidden in my books. Tanka is my fave among the 3.

I think you should try, Eddie. It's really nice.

Thank you so much for coming on my page.

[Jewel Chanda]

"in sickness and health I will go with you"... "As I humbly give my life".... a dreamy creation.. read it, liked it and enjoyed... :)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thank you. =)

[Faceless Poet]

Precious as the wedded bliss
Pure as true loves first kiss

- Faceless Being

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

What will happen if dreamboy meets dreamgirl? LOL
Thanks, fb.

[Faceless Poet]

perfect match, but in some cases, we can only dream, sometimes it comes true, sometimes it doesn't, life is too imperfect in many senses, it can only be perfect, if it is true and pure.