He Loves Me

He loves me like sunshine
The light of his day
He never forgets his words
Even when he's away

He loves me like the moon
The lamp of his night
He never thinks of anyone
Even if I am out of sight

He loves me like a baby
The baby girl of his life
The only one he dreams
His forever lovely wife

He loves me like the sea
Tide never leaves the shore
I always come to him
I love him forevermore.

Author's Note

He loves me always and for all ways...and I do.

Reviews

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

A simply sweet poem that makes the romantic in my sigh.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thank you, sir.

[Ghost]

Love is such a wonderful feeling (almost magical) but if it is real, then let it live and breathe let love contain your soul... Thank you for sharing

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Yes. Thanks for dropping by, sir.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

written like a female Poe...with the intensity of Edgar A. but also with a lot more hope and peace than with his writes.
j.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks a lot sir j

[Bland]

This certainly has potential, and I do like the metaphors a lot. Here are two additional things to consider:

1. Metre: think about the number of syllables per line and the significance of your choice of this number; for instance, an even and consistent number of syllables is indicative of idealism and happiness, something I believe this piece embodies. Also, consider the placement of syllables to emphasise certain words: for instance, Shakespeare uses iambic pentameter (lines of ten syllables with every other syllable stressed) to make certain words more prominent.

2: Punctuation: poetry, like prose, is to be read. Because of this, poetry, unless intended to convey a stream of consciousness, should be punctuated. Apart from this feature, punctuation, by controlling a reader's reading flow and establishing relationships between lines and stanzas, helps bring emphasis and contrast into your poetry, meaning that you're able to give another dimension of meaning to your poem.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thank you for dropping by, sir.