Haiku Suite

Haiku Suite

A Poem by heavenscentgirl1


sunshine filters in
robins share their happy songs
greatness all around


sunshine warms the earth
mourning doves meandering
squirrels run about


raindrops fall to earth
flora proudly standing tall
nature is renewed

© 2017 heavenscentgirl1



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A lovely haiku string my friend, just one little point if i may ...the alliteration between "mourning" and "meandering" is wonderful but using "ing" twice in such a small line is not very good in any kind of form.Maybe "mourning doves meander free" ? ,just a suggestion:)


Posted 1 Year Ago


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heavenscentgirl1

3 Months Ago

Thanks for taking time to review this one Stella ~ I truly do appreciate it my friend.

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I ADORE haikus. Very simple. Very lovely. Great read.

Posted 3 Months Ago


I must admit I am quite fond of the haiku and senryu form. I've never presented multiple verses though. Love the nature appeal to this.

Welcome to the WC!

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

heavenscentgirl1

3 Months Ago

Kelly, thanks so much for the visit & kind words in review of this little Haiku Suite. Writing abou.. read more
Well spoken and reasoned Haiku...

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

heavenscentgirl1

6 Months Ago

Thanks for reviewing another of my postings Chris ~ it is very much appreciated.

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Gee
A celebration of nature in your three well penned Haikus ( Haiku ??)

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

heavenscentgirl1

8 Months Ago

Thank you Gee for the kind words in review of this posting ~ they are very much appreciated.
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I've always liked nature poems so this was easy to read and like. The images are clear.

Nice job on this. :)

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

heavenscentgirl1

10 Months Ago

Relic, thank you for reading another of my limited offerings here on WC ~ it is very much appreciate.. read more
Like your poem...life....friendships renewed. Thank you for posting those lovely words MJ.

Posted 11 Months Ago


heavenscentgirl1

11 Months Ago

Thank you so much Kitty, your kind words mean so much to me. I'm so glad to see you here my friend.. read more
Hit nail on head
Written words now read
Smashing write enough said

Posted 11 Months Ago


I am not sure I agree with Stella about "mourning" and "meandering". I think the 'ings' work very well!
As for the three haikus, I think they work well together too, celebrating nature. I especially like the word 'renewed' as the last word in the suite. Thank you for sharing.

Posted 11 Months Ago


Hello there : )
Very rarely do I read a haiku (or three) that use strong poetic language that actually pulls me in, but let me assure you, this did just that. This suite captures the beauty of the form in how it describes nature, sets a peaceful ambience, and maintains a creative brevity. I enjoyed your descriptions, your vocabulary, and your ability in making every line speak concisely and effectively ... you didn't waste a single syllable!
I assume you're new to this site, so welcome to WC. I look forward to reading more of your works.

- William Liston

Posted 1 Year Ago


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ahahahaha ...i love your closing haiku ... at a "certain age" one may wish all it took to stand tall was to get caught in the rain ;) (but i am a dirty old man)
seriously .. these are so wistful, eloquent and inspiring ... i feel a peace and appreciation of nature in the reading ..so well done says i! very fine stuff!
E.
ps. i thought i was visiting Richards pages .. surprised to find it was not him .. a mistake i will make again Ms. heavenscent :)


Posted 1 Year Ago



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