Haiku Suite

Haiku Suite

A Poem by heavenscentgirl1


sunshine filters in
robins share their happy songs
greatness all around


sunshine warms the earth
mourning doves meandering
squirrels run about


raindrops fall to earth
flora proudly standing tall
nature is renewed

© 2017 heavenscentgirl1



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A lovely haiku string my friend, just one little point if i may ...the alliteration between "mourning" and "meandering" is wonderful but using "ing" twice in such a small line is not very good in any kind of form.Maybe "mourning doves meander free" ? ,just a suggestion:)


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heavenscentgirl1

3 Months Ago

Thanks for taking time to review this one Stella ~ I truly do appreciate it my friend.

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A lovely haiku string my friend, just one little point if i may ...the alliteration between "mourning" and "meandering" is wonderful but using "ing" twice in such a small line is not very good in any kind of form.Maybe "mourning doves meander free" ? ,just a suggestion:)


Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

heavenscentgirl1

3 Months Ago

Thanks for taking time to review this one Stella ~ I truly do appreciate it my friend.

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Well now, Mary Jo,
I would like to take this opportunity to warmly welcome you to the Café, and to say I hope you will enjoy it here and make many new friends and fans. Judging by this delightfully rendered suite of Haiku, I'd say you're well on your way.
What a lovely introduction to yourself, sharing one of the most challenging of Japanese forms there is, and I might add, in virtually perfect form, count, imagery, word and font choice, making a very appealing presentation for your new poet friends to enjoy.

Such a positive message and spiritually graceful ambience to please the mind's-eye and heart's soul … blessings and many thanks! ⁓ Richard : )


Finer points: Resist "the", "a", "and" words, using your keenly-creative poetic voice. Just message, if you'd like examples … I am always happy to lend a fine poetess my help. 😊

Posted 1 Year Ago


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heavenscentgirl1

1 Year Ago

Richard, thanks so much for the warm welcome to the Café and I too hope that I'll make many new fr.. read more
Richard

1 Year Ago

'Twas a true pleasure. : )
Love haiku - so this suite filled me with joy upon reading (x3)! Great use of connected subject matter! :-)

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heavenscentgirl1

1 Year Ago

Phill, thanks so much for stopping by for a visit and it truly warms my heart to hear that this Ha.. read more
They all are pleasing to the mind's eye dear poet.

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heavenscentgirl1

1 Year Ago

Tony, its a pleasure to have you visit my page and leave your words in review. Thank you very much.. read more
Your choice of words gives a beauty to the breaking day. Meandering fits perfectly. A perfect haiku set.
Well done, Hsg!

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heavenscentgirl1

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much for your continued support my friend. It means a lot to me to receive your words .. read more

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