Pick Up Artists.

Pick Up Artists.

A Poem by herohappenings

She sucked up his words like a Black Hole swallowing stars. Her face glowed in the shimmer of his voice. And his words were luminous, languid, they flowed through language like fireflies drunk on their own light. She too was drunk, gargling down his whispers and laughing gaily at his eloquent but unfunny remarks. Her squawking seemed vulgar in comparison.

But all the same she was beautiful, so deceptively beautiful, and yet she was as hollow as a porcelain doll.


As the night began to slowly shuffle into the morning light, he performed his final act. With all his charms and illusions he commanded the glamour of the night, and in a light-second the porcelain girl - disappeared.


 Perhaps, this would of been impressive, 

if she had been all there to begin with.   


© 2013 herohappenings



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herohappenings
reviews are great! Is that a hint ? I think so. :)

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I agree, reviews are agreat, but I suck at reviews.
I would much prefer to talk about the beautiful girl,
dripping desire, who was hollow as a porcelain doll.
Who sucked up the miscellaneous guys words like
a black hole sucking stars. Dammmm ! Wish I coold
think up incredible phrases like that. You got a piece
of heaven on your tongue, lady. Cherish and nourish it.
----- Eagle Cruagh


Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

herohappenings

4 Years Ago

aw, you're too kind :)



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I agree, reviews are agreat, but I suck at reviews.
I would much prefer to talk about the beautiful girl,
dripping desire, who was hollow as a porcelain doll.
Who sucked up the miscellaneous guys words like
a black hole sucking stars. Dammmm ! Wish I coold
think up incredible phrases like that. You got a piece
of heaven on your tongue, lady. Cherish and nourish it.
----- Eagle Cruagh


Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

herohappenings

4 Years Ago

aw, you're too kind :)
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Word missing in first sentence.

I feel the title directs me to the male PUA, but the poem is actually about the 'hollow doll' female. I wonder what universe this is where PUAs are charming rather than creepy, and whether I should be taking something away in terms of judging a man who spends his time flattering hollow women.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

herohappenings

4 Years Ago

Thanks! This previously wasn't titled but I thought it would be fun to see if the title "Pick Up Art.. read more

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