Lost In My Writing

It's pretty lost alright...

Pick me last and pay no attention

To the fact that I am ill tempered and lost

Shake hands with someone unformed….intellectually

And treat our trysts as skeptically as a pirate’s transaction

“You ok man?”

“Yeah, yeah, who’s asking?”

“You are.”

“Oh right, let’s move on to the next question.”

Transferring thoughts shaped like land mines

From me to you isn’t as dangerous as it seems

If handled correctly you have a bag of explosives

To be used for moral wars at a later date

“You ok man?”

“No, no, who’s asking?”

“Father time.”

“Oh, right, that ticking is driving me insane.”

I once grasped at the world’s sweetest cherries

And picked flowers with pixies in open toed sandals

The craft took hold and opened doors of pitch

The goo came flooding through painfully slow…itching

“Trains leaving.”

“Oh s**t, where’s my ticket?”

“Sold out love.”

“Why can’t I just Ride?”

“Because this world’s had enough.”

“Of what?”

“Of you…”

 

Author's Note

Tick, tock...

Reviews

[Bacchus]

I like the contrast of the mine field and the other flower filled one.
Great work with contact and multiple metaphors going at the same... Time!

[Crowley]

Thank you so much...I appreciate the review!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

with writing, getting lost is okay.....because most often we will end up at a really good spot, no matter where we go or how we go...i just let the muse take me wherever she wants...never a plan---just take the ride or the drive and floor it.

[Crowley]

Sometimes I can't get out of my own way, so I just write it anyway. this is one of those. sometimes its gold and sometimes its s**t. but at least it was something....lol.

[Isabella Cezanne]

This is absolutely amazing.

[Crowley]

Thank you so much!!!

[Lyn Anderson]

I can so relate to being somewhere, carrying on with whatever is at hand, and either writing or thinking up writing while getting things done. I love it

[Crowley]

Thank you so much!!! some times when I write it is solely for myself, so sometimes I get a lot of Huh? But thats ok. I just promise to write something everyone can enjoy soon...lol.

[Chris Shaw]

Never been any good at giving directions, so don't expect me to come up with a solution. I get lost myself when it comes to writing. I got two poems in one when I read your lines. Two for the price of one. I'd say I got a bargain here. I really enjoyed your stanza three, memorable lines and your use of dialogue.

Chris

[Crowley]

lol....I use a lot of dialogue and refrains. More so refrains, I love them because they seem to me to be the voice behind the coherent, politically correct thought. Thanks so much, I owe you a couple today!!!

[Samuel Dickens]

Don't fret--just hop that train when no one's looking. Or don't. I wish I could help you, but my compass only works every now and then.

[Crowley]

Thanks Sam, I hope you are well. and Happy Sunday!

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

Being in the rabbit hole sucks...I hate being late and always feeling rushed ...Mad hatter thoughts

[Crowley]

Exactly...I'm not even sure what I was thinking when I wrote this on, it been so long ago. Thanks again!

[barleygirl]

Yes, you’re definitely lost & I can’t help you find your way out of this maze becuz I’m stuck in my own fantasyland where the words drag me time & time again. Your message is pleasantly “out there” which can always be explained away becuz of your well-chosen title. You are the only poet I’ve known that uses dialogue often in verse, not just a random utterance, but an extended conversation! I like it! It’s weird. Fits your style perfectly. I’m just kiddin’ ya . . . I love your writing even when I’m riding a horse with no name that can’t keep up with you (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Crowley]

Dialogue and refrains. dialogue to interject reality where needed, refrains to listen to the voice behind the rational thought, it is always much more interesting. This piece is a mess, I wrote it quite a while ago. Thanks for coming by and treating me like a real writer!!!! lol...Wishing you a happy Sunday!!!