Crucify lover

crucify me to the depths of your soul

crucify me until our bodies mend as one

crucify me until you're touch is worth remembering

love me until you're heart stops beating

love me until they break off your arms

love me until they decide for you not to speak 

it took me so long to see, what was hidden behind your demon

it took me so long to see, what was really behind those good looks

it took me so long to see, the way your eyes spoke to me like no other

Author's Note

Not my best work, but I take pride in the fact that its personal to me. Constructive criticism will work well for me.

Reviews

[Dayran]

I think there's a ' Diana the huntress ' down the road from here. You found your aim in the last stanza - Love that deceives the other but exalts the self. It woke me.

[L0v3craft]

Stop with the "Its not my best work" crap, hun!

When it comes to capturing an emotion in poetry I believe it IS your best work--its just beautiful for us to read another writer's feelings...it gives us a moment to feel what you're feeling.

This poem is powerful in its tragic love. I'm far too odd to understand love (although I do enjoy reading about it) and I find it almost impossible to write about it, so I envy you in a way :P

[VelvetRosetta]

You have a great talent I am very pleased with your writings. Full meaning and emotion.

[~Juliette~]

This is so powerful, for such a short poem. Very nice and Well written with lots of emotion.

[Richard Rosado]

it's really good, you can actually notice the feeling, and the story behind it..... poems don't have to be all about verses,rhymes,grammar....sometimes you just have to write what you feel, and for those 10 seconds or more, when the reader is reading your poem, he can feel the same way, you felt when you wrote it.