I don't want to die living in a high-rise grave

Yes! Its true. I got the inspiration by a song by Metric.

The water was so high over my head I couldn't catch my breath

I don't wanna die living in a pool made of your lies

The plastic bag pulled so tight that my vision was red

I don't wanna die living in a bag of your insecurities

The morphine so deep in my veins I can't see straight

I don't wanna die being the drug you abuse.

 

Reviews

[NightShade]

Elegance and power in a most succinct form! Holy freaking amazing Bat-Girl!

[Marie Harrison]

Powerful poem to me
Yearnings to escape some sort of
Love addiction
Wanting to break free
from feelings of being
trapped by an insecure
and abusing person.

[Darksummerswind]

A short poem with a lot of personal feelings in it. It just shows that you don't need to write a thousand words just to get what you're thinking or feeling across to people.

[Daytonight]

I liked the form and colored fonts to emphasize your point. Well done.

[PROPAGANDIST]

"I don't wanna die being the drug you abuse."
wow like that genius

[Kenneth S.]

Wow, just wow!

[DontBlink158]

i loved how you took different ways to die, but then intertwinded them with insecurites, lies, and drugs. I really liked it, great job

[P.M. Lenski]

I agree with what femme said about you changing "I don't wanna die being the drug you abuse".

I really thought this portrayed your thoughts that you easily have hidden in your confusing personality,my cass :PP. But keep up the good writing hun.

[PoppySilver]

I love the conciseness to this piece! Very well thought out and driven home! Powerful love!
We can think of so many negatives we are immersed within and yet...I like the dual balance in this poem..the self..."you"...
Excellent piece!
xx

[miguelbovine]

way to short,but to the point. It's dark but could be darker.Its very good,I think you could do better..I feel a great poem in you something that will shock the world. I loved it1