Sacred Text

 

 

 

Reviews

[Elisa Laura]

Thank you Muse for bringing me back to the Vatican, and Rome for a while, and even in middle agaes, I loved the descriptive essence of this write. With a great, erotic wink in it. (Like those times really could be) You never chase to amaze me, The love of Latin hasn't needed an translation, the tongue spoke well... "drowning in the holy water" was for me the line, a rebirth, of all... with a wink... and " my heart is just a pulse that adorns your spirits smile" one to think about... I felt you were talking to a holy person. (for you) I admire this.... Wonderfully imagery. You must have read all Dan Brown's for sure. Amazing work....

E.L. xo

[Elisa Laura]

You did so well!! it is amazingly when some can reach such. You did a good job. The work the music, the graphic processing, everything. My truest compliments, keep on writing your talent!! :))

[A. H. Pinley]

Nice work! I like how it flows. It's not like traditional poetry.

[SyberRose]

Beautifully written like a proverb... loved the fonts too and the photo...you really go all out with presentation...not to mention music...SyberRose

[The Cobra Lounge]

not the original pic "pout" I lost it somehow in a rewrite, and could not find it. I wish you could have seen it....it felt holy just to look at it. If I find it again, this pic shall be replaced with it.

[Jeremy Baker]

Well ... this is just beautiful. So refreshing, so gentle. Just what I needed right now. Thank you for sharing =)

[Hayley]

This is so very interesting how you incorporated strong religious undertones, topped off with the music to go with it. It kind of brings me back to thinking of the basics of life, why we are here, and how tradition and religion have brought us this far. I get the sense of a heaven and a hell depicted here. It's light and yet deep at the same time.
Incredible.

[The Cobra Lounge]

your preception stuns me at times...you are the first to see the dark in this piece...it is in there...so many are blinded by the religious overtones that they fail to see the hidden dark. Religion..love...if we are head over heals in it...we can become blind to the threat of becoming lost in it...brainwashed. There's beauty in it too...but we must be careful to not cross that fine line of deception.

[The Cobra Lounge]

I sacrifice my belief to believe...think about that for a second...is that a good thing...or bad thing?

[Hayley]

depends on how you look at it I suppose. Hmm that is kind of funny though, to me the darkness of the piece really jumped out at me with the word choice of "drowning." I just kind of got the feeling of being in over ones head, while head over heels. Hence the contrast with the religious heaven and hell. The holy water balances both. Glad I could stun you :)

[The Cobra Lounge]

your beauty, heart, and talent will always stun me. :))

[Nick.B]

The music fits in very well with your words, love your imaginary and the way you interpreted faith and the way we believe in some things from beyond (or I'm being too personal with this one, accessing my own memories who knows...) anyway great write with an interesting subject, the line "drowning in the holy water" was...simply amazing love your style "bad a*s"...great job

[The Nude Writer]

Wow.. beautiful work of literary art :) Love the music accompaniment and the picture is pretty cool too. Overall, I'm a fan :)

[James William Dyer]

I like it. My only criticism is that in placers it sounds modern, and in others it sounds archaic, for example, "I question not" I almost feel would be better off being "I don't question". I saw a 'the' that broke the rhythm, too, um..."drowning in the holy water", sounded better, to me, as "drowning in holy water". Just my opinions, though. I liked the poem, it'd be interesting if you compiled some of these dark, murmuring poems into a modern-day grimoirre.

[The Cobra Lounge]

that was my intent...to play on the use of language...hence the pic...it is supposed to be archaic/a modern prose. I reread...and have to "agree" with your suggestion with "the" unfortunately it's more work than it's worth to me to go in and edit it..did it on photoshop and the image is not editable....errr...I should have known better, will try and modify it on a rainy day.

[James William Dyer]

So...you can post the poem as an Image, a .jpg or .png from Photoshop here? F**k, would that not solve some problems.....you just saved my night :) :) :)....btw, I love the sound of munks chanting, submission is a beautiful sound, isn't it??? But dangerous, too.

[James William Dyer]

and then, the perspective of using both the archaic tongue and the vernacular, as you point out, can also have its advantages...nice write

[The Cobra Lounge]

but not everybody can read and/or see it as a PNG or JPEG. :/

[The 13th Eros]

God from God, light from light... How I love to listen to a heart released in pure beauty. And your words long for such release; for flight above the storms of the soul... for bliss. May your hunger and thirst be ever satisfied, precious Muse. Let your love be as boundless as the universe created for your sweet presence in this sacred moment.

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

My evening has just started with a glimpse at your sacred text muse.
Something in your words today, and the way you string them together, gently, on a soft-thread...first a bright dandelion, then dark-green fern, then the sigh of a yearn, the flight of the sermon, balanced gait and fragrance made paradise complete, salvation to the parched soul and admiration to the believer who believes...hearts question the uncanny, when in the presence of so many...why prophets do meet in prophetic bliss ...to gaze at each other in solemnity.
Thank you my friend for this opportunity to write you in reply to your uplifting heart-song.

[roarke]

to me the ability to believe and religion are subjects widely removed from each other. This piece evokes the distance. Liquid-y smooth prose, beautiful presentation, rapt soul heart musings. Very refined. Brava

[The Cobra Lounge]

Man created religion to better understand our purpose....faith cannot be taught.