Just an aftertaste....................

Just an aftertaste....................

A Poem by +she plays with matches+

You stopped me at the first hello, an
 
older and charming handsome fellow
 
we quickly went from friends to lovers
 
I began to slaver for something more
 
I wanted to extinguish you, tasting
 
your salty skin, igniting a craving within
 
I need more to satisfy this palate, your
 
smell of blood sweet like punch, so I
 
pursue my first innocent lick and bite
 
only to get you stuck between my teeth
 
breaking fingers and splintering bones
 
I try to savor your affection in my mouth, but
 
what was once a confection has turned bitter
 
instead I had to swallow you down whole
 
bloated now from the weight of your soul.

© 2014 +she plays with matches+



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Well slap my a*s call me Charlie and tell me to see Wonka bars. The start gave me the impression the end would not be as harsh. But I loved it, the entire flow could have been someone's thoughts when lying in bed and having the ever important moment of clarity.

Posted 5 Years Ago


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I had that for dinner last night.

Truly a phenomenal write...you never cease to amaze me, let me have a taste of your soul....

Posted 4 Years Ago


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Frieda P

4 Years Ago

A headache again? ;-) xo
+she plays with matches+

4 Years Ago

forgot the beano
Frieda P

4 Years Ago

Some things are just worth a bit of discomfort hun ;-)
There is both a pleasure and a pain in passion, and you've tasted the beautiful bittersweet life deeply. Now tell me, sweetest muse... have you found a new recipe book that will give you what you have longed for so long? May it ever be. xoxo

Posted 4 Years Ago


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The 13th Eros

4 Years Ago

And you know what? God loves you on both days. You are beautiful beyond belief and this moment is yo.. read more
+she plays with matches+

4 Years Ago

I had to make peace with that..yes I think you are right. xo
The 13th Eros

4 Years Ago

You are loved here too, and nothing can change that. xo
This is inspiration to all the world's "older men." Never have I wanted so badly to be extinguished, bloodied, bitten, broken, splintered, stuck between teeth, and swallowed.

Unfortunately, nobody ever notices that I'm "older," because I"m so shockingly immature.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Wow. This was really good. I loved the grueling imagery at the end, and the tone of the novel. Like MoriartyMesa said, "the start gave me the impression the end would not be as harsh." I agree. The change of tone and imagery was unexpected, but definitely a great twist in the poem. My favorite part personally was:
"what was once a confection has turned bitter
instead I had to swallow you down whole
bloated now from the weight of your soul."
Great poem ^^ Keep writing

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Hilarious deterioration of relatively innocent desire into bored Swiftian cannibalism. It reminds me of National Lampoon's Radio Dinner parody of Desiderata, Deteriorata: "Keep in mind that a walk through the ocean of most souls would scarcely get your feet wet. Fall not in love therefore. It will stick to your face."

Methinks it's a Sagittarian thing to find the satiric value in cannibalism. Swift did it in his A Modest Proposal, wherein he offered the eating of babies as a solution to famine & overpopulation in Ireland. I've touched on similar sentiments often (tho' Leo, I have an additional "release" factor via Jupiter in Sagittarius).

And what's the weight of that -- belch -- bloated soul? 21 Grams? ;-)


Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

+she plays with matches+

5 Years Ago

21 grams of saturated fat. A great source of carbs. Ha
Pax Analog

5 Years Ago

Ah. Didja know the film 21 Grams was named after a notion that the soul weighed that, based on weigh.. read more
+she plays with matches+

5 Years Ago

My subconscious mind says I've read that "somewhere".
You are such a heart breaker ( and soul eater LOL ) .. This is deliciously evil.. that's the least I can say... :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The young maiden would do well to head your poem and avoid the bitter aftertaste, but then again, was it worth the "sweet confection"?
Ha. Lovely write!


Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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You have such a cool way of writing. I loved this one. I loved the last three lines, great, powerful finish to a poem! Also really love the bit about being suck between your teeth.
awesome work!

Posted 5 Years Ago


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Pax
i love the methaphor used with vivid imagery, but methaphor set aside i find it really dark with a tone of fantasy. Like a monster devouring its prey, savouring the tastes until the last drop. Great work!

Posted 5 Years Ago


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Muse, you're no doubt an intense and intelligent woman. It comes through in much of your work. Awesome write, again.

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