Just an aftertaste....................

You stopped me at the first hello, an

 

older and charming handsome fellow

 

we quickly went from friends to lovers

 

I began to slaver for something more

 

I wanted to extinguish you, tasting

 

your salty skin, igniting a craving within

 

I need more to satisfy this palate, your

 

smell of blood sweet like punch, so I

 

pursue my first innocent lick and bite

 

only to get you stuck between my teeth

 

breaking fingers and splintering bones

 

I try to savor your affection in my mouth, but

 

what was once a confection has turned bitter

 

instead I had to swallow you down whole

 

bloated now from the weight of your soul.

Author's Note

Reviews

[MoriartyMesa]

Well slap my a*s call me Charlie and tell me to see Wonka bars. The start gave me the impression the end would not be as harsh. But I loved it, the entire flow could have been someone's thoughts when lying in bed and having the ever important moment of clarity.

[SuicidePact.]

this was amazing

[Lion of Judah]

To wallow in sensual favor as words will fly you to the moon

[Chris]

a revisit... thoughts still echo within

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Okay...reading this the second time, three months later, has a whole new meaning... I think I know this guy? lol

I totally love this!! Damn this is good! No...It's better than good, it's great! And even better the second time around. Sheer Perfection!

[Cassie Fraga]

oooooh WOW!! LOVE! LOVE! LOVE! your play on words here!! def. talent at its best!! and the "weight of your soul..." damn that is one hell of a line in itself!! AWESOME WRITE!!!

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Magnificent metaphors! This is sweet~ I adore it - bloated by the wieght of your soul.....great line Muse.. A + skills
So unique..

Chloe

[Jeremy Baker]

Wow, all I could picture was a snake, trying to be frisky but having to devour it's lover and wishing it hadn't. Random, huh? But I thought your poem was excellent, with a deeper meaning than I've perhaps uncovered. I too will savour going back and reading this again and again. =)

[Manda]

What a way to communicate the overwhelming feeling of desire, a very petrifying yet enjoyable feeling that comes and goes so easily to some. You made it into a living thing...what an enjoyable read.

[John Jackson (El Juero)]

This started out so light and airy...
your words splashed vivid black/grey/sepia toned images into my mind, all senses involved.
Wow! I might lose some sleep tonight...
Outstanding write.

[Amila Jay]

A powerful write with a strong sense of will, excellent write:-)