Precious Things....

If this makes you sick...then there is hope for humanity.

 

 

Shhh

innocence will

 

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p

 

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 BE STILL 

my child.
Let me remind you,

what is spoken and said.
Your hopes and dreams,
they must be bled.

 

Be a good little Girl,

who loves me back,

as I pretend to care.

Your dress is all filthy,

with lice in your hair.

 You've left me,

 a disgusting mess.

I'll wash out the vomit.

A dirty mouth

 needs Bleach,

 and a good dose of Comet.

 

It's okay my darling.
You'll heal with the pain.
FEEL

this needle and thread.
My precious...

precious thing.

 

You need a hug?

Here's a good squeeeeeeze.

 

Soft skin and bones,

to love and to hold.

Why do you wrestle?

We need to

cut/deep,

don't put up a tussle.

Purge and be empty,
only guilt can you keep.

 

 

** Shhhhh **

Don't cry....
peace be with you.
It's just the skin peeling back.

Your world will
feel safe, when it finally
converts BLACK.

 

 

Reviews

[unsavable_soul]

I too am a father,
I understand the mentality behind this. I also see a bit the true darkness within. Not to say you would harm your child or any child, but as to say there are those you would harm if the reasons were right or the time appropriate. I am impressed at how freely you throw yourself into the arms of your concept. You truly exist within it even if only temporarily, I can't say how temporarily. No, that's a piece for another time. I see a 2... 3... 4... sliding into a five. This is ever so haunting. thanks for the suggest I love it.
Sincerely
Christopher

[unsavable_soul]

P.s. Loving this line for the sheer grit, literally.

"A dirty mouth
needs Bleach,
and a good dose of Comet."

You sicken me, in all the right ways.
Chris

[The Cobra Lounge]

ache...she pushed me over the edge two years ago with a mystery illness...I was starting to get scared that the school might start accusing me of something terrible. With sleep deprivation..worry...it inspired this dreadful writing.

[The Cobra Lounge]

I consulted with a friend before sharing this...I was scared of being judged.

[unsavable_soul]

This I greatly understand,
But someone wise recently told me to push the envelope. I agreed and the result I dare say is TRUE ART. Always in love with your works thus far.
Sincerely
Chris

[captain]

It's a painful sight. It's like I am feeling the pain too together with the child. It gives a horror feel to it on which you have done in poetic form. You are incredible to portray some dark emotions. No judgement here, for i know this is fiction. Releasing your stress in a creative way brings great writes just like this piece.

[Adam was here]

Woof this almost too dark for this old lad. You write dark and with true talent.

[Moflo]

Brilliantly put together, described profoundly, and gets right at the emotion of every reader. This piece flows flawlessly, its a great model of emotion. Very nice work Muse. I hope your daughter is better soon.

[The Cobra Lounge]

She's been well for several months now. Thank you. :))

[Moflo]

Glad to hear that! :) And not a problem!

[David Scott]

No judgement here. If you can fathom great pain then you can know great healing. Where the soul has been in darkness the smallest light is heaven. People who do not deal with this pain do not understand that it will not go away if you just don't talk about it. Pain will hold you down and force itself on you again and again until you set it out into the light. Now everyone can see it. You can walk around it to look at it and see that "it" is not sho you are. That you still exist separate, strong, breathing, loving despite what "it" has done to you. It is kind of like going to AA. "Hello, I'm... and I have pain". The first and most repeated step to recovery. I hope you child never ever suffers again, but if she does, she will have a knowing and understanding mother to hold her.
Couragous!

[Some John]

Amazing, WOW
Very powerful, it squeezed my spine, made it hard to breathe a-little.
I cannot judge if what you write about is right or wrong, nor will I! As long as writing it helped you in some way or another, that's what counts.
Thank you for the entertaining read

[Sami Khalil]

You have captured the feelings marvelously and shed a special light on this condition...
Thank you for sharing...

[The Cobra Lounge]

Even the most loving Mother's can think dark thoughts when being physically and emotionally challenged I'm afraid.

[Sami Khalil]

I agree ... Thanks for sharing...

[Poetic Justice]

having children also, I totally understand your reasoning..this is an intelligent and haunting piece..without being overtly graphic, you blended your unique style and imagination to create a stunning and orginal poem. kudos.

[Pax]

You displayed a darker side of abuse, its a sad reality that it does really happen not just in our mere imaginations. no child must suffer from it but were not god who could do change its fate, still we could do something to prevent it by supporting organization that prevents it, yet again i hope they're not blind-spot type of people..

what a wonderful piece, a flipside of what you suffer and felt in that state.. Im glad your daughter is fine now..

[The Cobra Lounge]

she is better now...but this kind of mental illness is too taboo. Which is my specialty in writing I suppose. Approaching subject matters that make most people squirm.

[Heidi-Anne]

WOW. This is art. Not judging you at alll. I just love the display of words - the subject is hard to think about but beautiful anyway. WOW!