Morning Haze

My eyes opened slowly as i woke from my sleep. The night before i closed the blinds, but the bright sun found a way through. It shot warm beams of light on to my tiresome eyes. I gave up on sleep and got out of bed. I grabbed my blanket, went down stairs and walked out the front door. The ground was cold under the soles of my feet. A butterfly flew gracefully past my face. I followed it with my eyes. It seemed to kiss the air as it flutterd out of sight. I stepped off the stone path and my feet felt the cool glistening grass that swayed with the wind. The birds sang a sweet tune. The woodpecker pecked away trying to make a home in an old maple tree. I climbed onto a tree and sat on one of its kind branches. A lady bug crawled onto my motionless finger. It seemed to rest a moment before spreading its wings and flew away. I look to the sky, saw all the tree's intertwined branches and decided to climb some more. I climbed as high as i could to the top of the tree. The sky so blue and the clouds so white, I guess that brings a whole new meaning to "head in the clouds".

Reviews

[Mad Ben]

It's a nice description and I the end is well done, too.
The font hurts my eyes a bit though - you might want to space things out a bit ^^;
Anyway, keep up the good work :)

[MsMermaid]

Nicely done. While your thoughts tell a story, it is not truly a "story" in terms of writing stories. It is more of a prose poem than a story. Other than switching from past tense to present tense, sometimes in mid sentence, there was one incorrect usage of a word... "tiresome". For the context in which it is found, it doesn't quite work right. Otherwise a nicely crafted and fun to read prose poem. I love the nature scenes you painted. Such a feeling of beauty and tranquility with a great discovery ending. Keep honing your lovely talent.

[What happened to simple..]

'kind branches' has to be my favourite combination here - just the smooth loving personality that nature brings us.

[Nish...]

It's beautiful. It can produce vivid image in the readers' minds effortlessly.

[Dove]

The description in this story is great... no its incredible and I had a nice time reading this. All I can say is beautiful

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

i love the way you portray the beauty of nature and colors

[livinglifeloud]

I love your voice. The images are amazingly descriptive, which isn't seen very much. Great Work!

[Coyote Poetry]

A nice story in the poem. Always good to open your eyes to the beauty of life. I like how you ended the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Lesley]

BEAUTIFUL!!

[Lesley]

Beautiful!!